Luna

By Kahdai

Fri, 04 Feb 2011
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5 comments
 

Lunar Luna,
moon reflects
in her eyes,

stays up
with the stars
all night

so it no surprise

Luna goes to sleep
just after sunrise.

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Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Liked, Kahdai...very much;-) Just popped back to say, you may like to change an it's, or an it is, to the seventh line:- I.e.'It's no surprise.' Apart from that, as I said, smashing! Tina

 

Submitted by Beeme on
very sweet x

k.

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Kahdai, the moon is so special to me and I love the way you describe her here in this poem, staying up with the stars all night, like the mother staying up watching over her children. So beautiful Kahdai, I think you excelled yourself with this poem. Thankyou for a beautiful read. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
^^ yay thankyou all very much,! Tina I will change it thanks and Jenny I did have that idea in mind :) K xxx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Highhat on
Yes the moon is a very strong part of nature- beeming down during the night. Nice poem ;)Pia