FREE SPIRIT

Cherry

By skinner_jennifer

Fri, 27 May 2011
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36 comments
 

As I sauntered almost drifting in slow motion,
eyes freaky...off the wall
gaze into oblivion unaware...
as mesmerizing harmonies
drifted on the breeze,

many colours transcending
across the ancient fields and valleys,
a trance like state
our eyes tantalized
by what we see...
but suddenly becomes unobtainable,

communities seem to undulate
like waves upon an ocean,
painted faces locked in
their own minds...seperate and free...
racing like wild horses on the wind,

darkness now ever present,
precious dreams wrapped in black velvet...
as the music rocks a nation
sending out wave upon wave
of hypnotic sounds...
blending like colours on canvas.

Certificate 15
Poems
Spiritual

Comments

Submitted by seashore on
I like this very much, Jenny.

Submitted by Highhat on
A haunting trip. Very good Jenny. ;)Pia

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I quite agree with Pia and Coral. Hauntingly beautiful, indeed, Jenny;-) Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
thankyou for letting me know and for reading seashore. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Thankyou pia, I wrote this after watching a film about Woodstock, the words just came flowing out. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina, glad you enjoyed this poem about a festival that rocked a nation. Thankyou for reading and your comment. Jenny.

 

Submitted by SteveM on
Hi Jenny, A really lovely piece. Just caught up with all the others. You're so prolific, how do you do it? 'precious dreams wrapped in black velvet...' Great line. Steve

SteveM

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Hi! Jenny amazing and beautiful, just great. The way you write it, capturing in colour and images. Like you say roll's of the tongue. Great loved it all. They are stating now disco light's some affected from colour and spinning. Stanza Many colours transcending across the ancient fields and valleys, a trance like state our eyes tantalised by what we see but suddenly becomes unobtainable. My word what an achievement of words. julie xx julie xx

Submitted by maisie on
loved the last two stanza/verses jen! absolutely brilliant... :)

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Thankyou so much Steve for your fine comment. I love that line too, it kind of reminds me of dreaming in the dark, darkness always reminds me of black velvet for some reason. Thankyou for reading this poem, it's always appreciated and glad you enjoyed. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi julie, what a lovely comment, I'm so glad you enjoyed reading my poem about Woodstock, Oh! how I would have loved to have been there, afraid I was only 15, and I don't live in the USA. Thankyou for reading this piece and it was kind of you to let me know. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
this is really lovely Jenny - fantastic imagery, full of colour

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi maisie, so glad you enjoyed this piece, it was great to hear from you, thankyou for leaving a comment. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Thankyou so much for the great comment Insert. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading this piece and also for letting me know. It's much appreciated. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Thankyou so much cherry pickers, wow! what an amazing end to the week to get cherries, it's really made my day. Thankyou so much. Jenny.

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Love this, Jenny - that last stanza is wonderful. "precious dreams wrapped in black velvet" - great image. Well done on the cherries :) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Just read this again with Woodstock in mind and it really made even more of an impression. Congrats on the cherries- well deserved. ;)Pia

Submitted by oldpesky on
This is really good, Jenny. And on reading again with Woodstock in mind it's even better swecond time around. Well done, and congratulations on the cherries.

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Congrats on the cherries, Jenny - this is stunning! 'painted faces locked in their own minds...seperate and free... racing like wild horses on the wind,' - really love this imagery, a beautiful poem and my new favourite of yours, too. Have started reading your story now and that too is just as rich and descriptive as this is! I'm only up tp Pt3 but I'll let you know what I think when I've finished - think it's brilliant so far, though, really enjoying it! Really well done with this, you captured the spirit of the people really well, I think :) Hope you have a lovely weekend, Rachel xx

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hello Magic, I guess even though you are too young to remember Woodstock, I'm sure that the festivals now are not so different. So it was very kind of you to leave such a nice message. Thankyou. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Dear Pia, that's really kind of you to come back and let me know. I really do appreciate getting cherries, so I'm on cloud nine at the moment. Thanks again. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hello Rachel, thankyou so much for reading, it's so great to hear from you. I'm very happy that you are reading and enjoying my story so far. I'm really glad you captured the spirit of the poem, having been to festivals in my younger days, I was able to take from that experience as well, so it was a lot of fun to write and ponder over. I really appreciate you letting me know what you thought. Thanks Jenny. xx

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Nathen, I'm really glad you enjoyed reading this poem, it's very kind of you to let me know, I so do appreciate it. Thankyou. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi there oldpesky, so sorry I didn't answer your comment straight away, I've just noticed it. I'm really happy that you enjoyed my poem and you read it twice, wow! thankyou so much. Hope you are having a great bank holiday weekend. Thankyou for reading and commenting. All the best, Jenny.

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Very nice, Jenny. Well done! Richard LP
Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by JoseHdz on
excellent! enjoyed these lines, specifically: 'wild horses on the wind' 'blending like colors on canvas' great title as well! cheers, Jose..

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Richard, thankyou for your kind words, I'm so glad you liked this poem. Thankyou for taking the time out to read, it's much appreciated. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Thankyou so much for reading this poem Jose, it's nice to know that you have enjoyed reading it and even nicer that you let me know. Thankyou so much. Jenny.

 

Submitted by ScoZen on
Hello there J. Enjoyed, all of it, and well done on the Cherry.
ScoZen

Submitted by V.C.Willow on
Love this poem. Reading it through it was mesmerising, I was imagining someone in a meditative or trance induced state reaching for a higher plane. V.C.

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