Hope
By Beeme
Sat, 23 Jul 2011
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They say that time heals all wounds
but burns heal slowly. The scars across
your body- red-winged, head for peace.
I'm stood below with the image
of your face, singed like love itself
burns tirelessly- caressing my soul.
There will never be a day when I
don't miss you, but my hands are still.
My tears fight for me, chase your
fleeting body but today I cannot mourn.
The tears erase the sting of pain, flow
slowly backwards into the lake.
I hold your hands; their pulsing bloodstream
entwined with the tide. Your words
fall across the horizon, steady and immortal,
“Don't cry, we're free.”
There the street lights always shine.
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Something so very poignant
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Something so very poignant about this, Beeme. I like it very much. Maybe a semi-colon after, 'I hold your hands; their pulsing bloodstream...' and also, in the second line, maybe 'burns heal slowly'
The last two lines, are the icing on the cake for me;-)
Tina
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You're welcome, Beeme;-)
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
You're welcome, Beeme;-) Reads beautifully now...not that it didn't before.
Tina xx
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I love the very start. It's
I love the very start. It's such a great way to open :)
Gorgeous piece.
Ephraim
Stains..
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This is a very impassioned
Permalink Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
This is a very impassioned poem. Well done. I suggest keeping your last line as a part of the line before, and replace last line, first word, with "as."
"Don't cry, we're free
as the streetlights always shine."
Richard LP
Richard L. Provencher
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