Complexion
By Beeme
Tue, 09 Aug 2011
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I wrote this poem when you wern't looking,
so I could imagine it would mean more.
I think of someone who loves me
scaling my house for my breath
on the windows.
Attempt to lift it with their fingertips,
then place it in a jar and keep
it on their bedside table.
Close but not touching.
Or document it in the list of people
who changed their life.
Proof of a living dream.
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Lovely, all of this.
Lovely, all of this.
"...Close but not touching..."
That's the line for me.
ScoZen
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This is wonderful Beeme, I
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
This is wonderful Beeme,
I had this image of a lover scaling a wall to
their lovers room, lifting the window, climbing
in and with a jar, catching the breath of a loved
one, to keep on their bedside table.
Great read.
Jenny.
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new Beeme Congats: on the
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Beeme
Congats:
on the cherry!
Beautiful poem. Short quick,
lovely images and love in a nut -shell.
Hope your ok.
julie xx
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I love this poem.
I love this poem. Congratulations on the cherry
Good work with the imagery too :)
Overall, great piece.
Ephraim.
Stains..
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Stunning, Beeme - that
Permalink Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Stunning, Beeme - that opening stanza is a delight! Brilliant stuff, all three of your last poems have been more than worthy of the cherries they've picked up, really well done I've loved them all :)
Rachel xx
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This is lovely and the end
This is lovely and the end is perfect, well earned cherry!
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You're getting better and
You're getting better and better Beeme - well done.
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