This Bright A Day

By Reid Laurence

Thu, 17 Nov 2011

2 comments

This bright a day
Cannot convince
The smallest bit
Or ever since

This bright a day
Survived the dark
The cold alike
And lived to spark

The story of
A time inside
In all of us
A place reside

And now that we
Have seen its grace
To wreck it all
By will erase

Destroy it too
Aversion who
And live in dark
Despairing you

Permalink Submitted by Chinobus on Thu, 2011-11-17 17:21

Excellent poem, I loved the dark allegories and the interconnectedness, good job writing friend!

- Chinobus -

Permalink Submitted by Highhat on Fri, 2011-11-18 14:04

I think the rhyme doesn't work so well but I do think the poem is very good and would benefit from a small tweak..