As it is in Heaven
By Silver Spun Sand
Fri, 27 Jan 2012
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34 comments
You would hardly have known
she had gone, but for the buds
on the juniper tree, blaring
into blossom, when hoar frost
was still feathering the vine...
but for the silence of her violin,
never have known she’d died
beneath a Winter’s moon
spilling from the mouths
of mounding clouds...
Never been aware of her passing,
except for the tolling of a bell,
as it rolled on through a dismal,
December’s morn. Not known
at all...save for the whippoorwill’s
plaintive song, begging she stay,
just one more day...holding back
the creep and the sweep of the tide,
and the heaven’s sweet sway.
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I really enjoyed this - read
I really enjoyed this - read it several times - very good work indeed
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"blaring into blossom, when
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
"blaring
into blossom, when hoar frost
was still feathering the vine..."
- love these images, Tina. This poem has a beautifully serene yet sad feel to it and it flows perfectly. Well done on the cherries!
Magic xxx
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really like this...agree
Permalink Submitted by the unfolding head on
really like this...agree with magic, flows perfectly
ddf
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It's not even been up for
It's not even been up for two hours and I've already been back a few times. Really like this one, Tina.
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This poem really took my
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
This poem really took my breath away...in one word
Tina. Perfect!
Jenny.
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What absolutely divine
What absolutely divine reminders Tina- I like these lines the best.. just one more day...
.save for the whippoorwill’s
plaintive song, begging she stay,
just one more day..
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Thank you, Your heart filled
Permalink Submitted by Don Michael on
Thank you,
Your heart filled mine,
Don
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lovely balance of nature and
lovely balance of nature and the passage of life.
maisie Guess what? I'm still alive!
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Well, when all the
Well, when all the commenters pick out a different line or different image as a favourite something's gone very very right and I'll add my halfpenny's worth; best for me is "spilling from the mouths of mounding clouds". There, I think now the whole poem is someone's favourite bit!
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Excellent - stupid word
Excellent - stupid word really, sounds like I'm giving you marks at the end of class and it's infinitely better than that.
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What a sweet and
Permalink Submitted by hilary west on
What a sweet and accomplished poem !
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new
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Silver-Spun-Sand
Tina,beautifully written
all of the poem,lump in my throat
sadness. Well done on the cherries!
That is a good writer,make one sit up!
julie x
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The whippoorwill has it -
Permalink Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on
The whippoorwill has it - plaintive and so beautiful. A great poem.
Linda
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Concise and exacting in its
Permalink Submitted by blighters rock on
Concise and exacting in its message, this is proof that the power of one's love can overcome weight of loss.
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I'm not surprised this has
I'm not surprised this has so many comments Tina - it is stunningly beautiful and reads 'triffik' as Del Boy might say. :-)
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