Equinox
By Silver Spun Sand
Fri, 21 Sep 2012
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Fall selects its colours well;
red, russet, aubergine – amber...
the colour of her eyes,
and in the soft hum of night
I remember how I fell for her
that summer.
Lazy, daisy-chain days
when we walked
the purple valleys
of the hills – talked
about the sky, and watched
the cattle-horns of eager stars.
But summer turned
to autumn all too soon,
and we went back to school;
yet we learned more from lessons -
such that could be taught
by fallen leaves.
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Lovely poem, Silver Spun
Permalink Submitted by The Walrus on
Lovely poem, Silver Spun Sand, nice use of language, and it reminds me of my first love when I was a kid.
'I remember how I fell for you,
that summer.' Personally I would omit that comma, in my mind it doesn't belong there - read it aloud first with and then without the comma.
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I ponder over such trivial
Permalink Submitted by The Walrus on
I ponder over such trivial sounding things for ages too - sometimes a fresh pair of eyes are all it takes to make one's mind up. The poem is pleasing with or without the comma, but, I think, more pleasing without it.
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A perfect poem for this time
Permalink Submitted by steve_elliott04 on
A perfect poem for this time of year. Autumn is truly upon us here (not sure where you are) and I find myself looking back to summer days. I particularly enjoyed the phrase 'eager stars' - wonderful imagery!
Cheers.
Steve
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Love all these Autumn poems
Love all these Autumn poems at the moment and yours too Tina..
;)Pia
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I absolutely love the autumn
I absolutely love the autumn colours in the leaves, like the trees have picked up embers from the sunset. Thanks Tina, Shannan
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Hello silver lady. I don't
Hello silver lady. I don't know how you do it but you do.
"cattle horns of eager stars" - you devil. That's so good.
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Lovely, Tina. I think you
Lovely, Tina. I think you could pick any old random words, shuffle them and make them beautiful.
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Hi Tina, it's so good to be
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina,
it's so good to be back reading your work, it's
been so long.
Such beautiful memories in this poem of younger
school days.
I loved the colours of fall, when the leaves
finally drop from the trees and those last three
lines said it all for me.
Loved this poem. Oh...and the title was just
perfect.
Jenny.
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