The Blackness

Cherry

By suz

Mon, 01 Oct 2012
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18 comments
 

I closed my eyes and blew the smoke out
And my eyes stayed closed and saw the blackness - Totally black
No glimmer of light at any corner
And I kept my eyes shut and breathed in the blackness - And listened
I had no breath
But heard the sounds of life..
The wind was strong and rattled all around the things that were loose
And I looked again, through eyes that were shut
The blackness still there
I felt happy
My soul was free
And able to see

Certificate U
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Z on
Your twist on the darkness being freedom is interesting.

Submitted by Nolan on
An interesting idea I must say. If it is pitch dark you can see all there is to see- with your eyes closed! Hope to read some more! Nolan &
 

Submitted by Mark Say on
Good observation on the different aspects of human perception; and nice sharp language that conveyed it very effectively. I'm not a big one for poetry, but really like this.

 

Submitted by suz on
I am so delighted that you liked this piece of writing - Thank you..

Submitted by Christine on
I love it, Suz.

Submitted by Sooz006 on
A really well observed poem. Congrats on the cherry, but you, do realise, as I am a Sooz, too, I may just have to kill you? On the other hand maybe us Suz-oozes should stick together. Welcome to the site and keep posting.

 

Submitted by suz on
thanks so much for the comment, your work is brilliant, I am delighted to make your aquaintance!!! I danced round the room at the cherries and yes us Suz-oozes should stick together, don't know what life was like before this ... must have been boring *^*!***

Submitted by Christine on
Don't kill her Sooz, she's suz. Different name altogehter. I told her to watch out for you!

Submitted by suz on
Hi Christine - my inspiration!!!

Submitted by scratch on
I hope that you remembered to breath again... Nice work.

 

Submitted by suz on
Scratch - I did, and hope to keep breathing for a long.... time thanks

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Well done, now let's see some more. Richard LP.
Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by jolono on
WElcome to the site Suz, really good this. More please!

 

Submitted by blighters rock on
Reminds me of my first joint, fear of the past replaced by acceptance of the now, and the wonderful feeling that the future may not be so scary after all. I'm a massive fan of your teacher's writing. Did you know she's going to be famous? Keep writing. Richard

 

Submitted by suz on
I have the biggest grin on my face and you have described the feeling to a tee...the teacher rocks by the way, not like any teacher I remember

Submitted by Parson Thru on
Mmmmmmmmm. Looking forward to more of this. Well-deserved!

Parson Thru

Submitted by moonphish on
moonphish - very nice :)

Submitted by Parson Thru on
Wow! Larkin. Poetic comment.

Parson Thru