CURTAIN CALL

By moonphish

Wed, 03 Oct 2012

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11 comments

the queens and kings
and knavish things
have traded red for black
the ace of spades has made the crawl
to top card on the stack

a silk top hat
now battered flat
a rabbit on his side
he cannot hold his ears up tall
for he is petrified

a weathered cane
in corner, lain
dissolving into dust
the golden tip now has a pall
of pimpled common rust

the balls that danced
askew, askance
are scattered on the floor
the season's changed from spring to fall
and they shall whirl no more

a tail of scarves
no longer carves
a rainbow brightly bled
there will not be a curtain call
the magic man is dead

Comments

Really cleverly worked

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Wed, 2012-10-03 08:24

Really cleverly worked moonphish. I like the way you tell us he is dead in the first verse, but without saying it direct. the ace of spades has made the crawl to top card on the stack. Then it's hinted again in the next three verses. Then the final verse says it all. Very original.

moonphish - i appreciate

Permalink Submitted by moonphish on Wed, 2012-10-03 16:55

moonphish - i appreciate your time and i am glad you enjoyed the subtly of this one

Hits all the buttons for me,

Permalink Submitted by Parson Thru on Wed, 2012-10-03 09:41

Hits all the buttons for me, moonphish. Very original, clean and screams mortality on full reverb. What stimulated it? Did I miss something?

Parson Thru

brilliant poetry, had to

Permalink Submitted by MS on Wed, 2012-10-03 09:43

brilliant poetry, had to read this a few times over.

moonphish - thank you for

Permalink Submitted by moonphish on Wed, 2012-10-03 16:58

moonphish - thank you for your kind words :)

moonphish - thanks parson

Permalink Submitted by moonphish on Wed, 2012-10-03 16:57

moonphish - thanks parson (love the name) ...just a poem i wrote in the middle of the night

Loved this :) really enjoyed

Permalink Submitted by young_choose_life on Wed, 2012-10-03 20:28

Loved this :) really enjoyed the indirectness of it :)

Well the muse must have

Permalink Submitted by Parson Thru on Wed, 2012-10-03 22:48

Well the muse must have spent the night with you. Great piece of writing.

Parson Thru

moonphish -thank you both

Permalink Submitted by moonphish on Thu, 2012-10-04 04:57

moonphish -thank you both for your kind comments

new moonphish Hi well

Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on Thu, 2012-10-04 08:57

new moonphish Hi well deserved cherries! I to must say great piece of writing! But wonder if or who the character,is because it is so real.the way you have explained comes over to me,comic or comedian,or juggler,magician, just a thought. I tried one title "The Young Eccentric Gentleman". But he is true! I saw out in summer Brighton. He was having a coffee with friends. I asked if could take a photo I have now great! julie

moonphish - no one is

Permalink Submitted by moonphish on Thu, 2012-10-04 17:33

moonphish - no one is particular but houdini comes to mind...thanks for the kind comments