Unlock the Gates

By Denzella

Wed, 10 Oct 2012
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Unlock the Gates

The life I’ve lived has passed me by
And now I sit and wait to die
My friends have gone, so why can’t I?
I’m ready now to say goodbye.

There’s no reason to struggle on
When all my friends have long since gone
My life has been a marathon
Upwards towards your echelon

If I die in a state of grace
Will that reserve for me a space
To sit in that heavenly place
Or must I win another race?

Please God grant me this one last thing
Unlock the gates and let me in.
My soul not in a state of sin
It’s a race I know I can win.

Death is now welcomed as a friend,
So let me know what you intend.
Though I pray you will not extend,
A life I cannot comprehend.

You’ve seen the deterioration
That makes life an aberration.
I would trade obliteration,
To free me from desolation!

Where is the laughter, I implore?
There is none in me any more.
My sadness you cannot ignore;
I was never like that before.

So grant me rest and give me peace
Such a kind act could give release
To suffering that needs to cease,
My death, your greatest masterpiece!

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Comments

Submitted by jolono on
Very productive today Moya, but hope this isn't the mood you're in! I especially liked the last verse and the last line of this. Nice one.

 

Submitted by Denzella on
Hello Jolono, No, I'm fine. This poem was written in response to something written by David Attenborough about his brother the film director, Richard Attenborough. It was David's description of his brother's condition that prompted me to write it. Another poem I have spent a lot of time tinkering with. Moya
 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Very moving, Moya. I'm sure laughter comes to you frequently, and as for the prayer, Jesus makes it clear that accepting him and his death on the cross for our forgiveness, is the door for peace and confidence, and honours him. 'I am the Way, the Truth and the Life.' I pray you will know that rest and peace you ask. I too appreciated that last line. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on
Hello Rhiannonw, Thank you for the read and your comment which is more of a blessing for which I thank you but as you will see from my reply to Jolono that it was Richard Attenborough who was really the subject of the poem. When I read what David had to say about his brother I was very moved by his words. Thank you once again for the read and your lovely comment. Moya
 

Submitted by Denzella on
Hello Bear, How nice of you to drop by. Thank you for the read and the encouraging comment. I know I have a long way to go with writing poetry but I like to think I might just be getting a tad better. Rhiannonw has helped me before and quite a few others too, Helvigo Jenkins being one, Jolono, Linda Wigzell Cress and others. I think when you say I have the ability to step in I think that may be because I mostly write in first person. Anyhow I much appreciate you reading and taking the trouble to comment. Moya