As I, the reluctant connoisseur, lay dying.
By Highhat
Sat, 08 Dec 2012
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I open the book to the page
where each word
reveals the consciousness
left to rest.
Reluctantly, I note the passage
as my fingers
trace whispering caresses
along the worn lines.
Rare, pulpy syllables
are wedged between
my tongue and cherub cheeks.
I slam the fictive points
at the crowd,
yet the impact is feeble.
The true picture is exposed
as sign upon sign
synthesise to create the gloom.
A weary traveller,
I nestle at the final destination:
the epilogue of my journey-
all of this ,
as I lay dying.
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I like the 'cherub cheeks'
Permalink Submitted by hilary west on
I like the 'cherub cheeks' of this slightly dark ode.
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Loved this: Reluctantly, I
Permalink Submitted by hudsonmoon on
Loved this:
Reluctantly, I note the passage
as my fingers
trace whispering caresses
along the worn lines.
Hope you're having a lovely weekend.
Rich
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The mystery that surrounds
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
The mystery that surrounds this poem, is deep and
meaningful.
Thankyou for the read and I hope you are well Pia.
Jenny.
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Very thoughtful, Pia. Slam
Permalink Submitted by Parson Thru on
Very thoughtful, Pia. Slam the fictive points at the crowd, but the impact is feeble. That's where it's at. Hope the snow isn't too bad and that you are well and in good spirits. x
Parson Thru
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An emotive poem, Pia, and
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
An emotive poem, Pia, and these, my favourite lines:-
Rare, pulpy syllables
are wedged between
my tongue and cherub cheeks.
Hope the snow has abated and that you don't run out of fags...never mind the food;-)
Tina;-)
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you inspire repeated
you inspire repeated readings of your work and each time new layers are revealed....very evocative :) - alvin
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Great poem Highhat, i felt
Great poem Highhat, i felt like this once after attempting to read a Dan Brown book.
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Oh Christ Highhat, i wasnt
Oh Christ Highhat, i wasnt comparing you to him!!! merely the feelings portrayed in your poem. Mr Brown couldnt muster a line of your talent.
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Pretty deep Pia, I like
Pretty deep Pia,
I like poems which only the writer understands the true meaning of and yet leads the reader to puzzle over their own interpretation and wonder if their experiences would fit into it. The last six lines were great, and I agree with MS about Herr Brown's talent vs yours.
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a fictive delight, but I
a fictive delight, but I feel the title is too long.
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I like a long title too,
Permalink Submitted by alex_tomlin on
I like a long title too, that's what drew me into reading this, and I'm glad I did.
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This isvery good Pia - Rare,
This isvery good Pia - Rare, pulpy syllables
are wedged between
my tongue and cherub cheeks.
whole poem is a pleasure to read.
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yes
yes uninterpretablehttp://dictionary.reference.com/browse/uninterpretable
I liked: I nestle at the final destination:the epilogue of my journey
as I lay dying.
minus the all of this. Just me I guess...Wes
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yes
yes uninterpretablehttp://dictionary.reference.com/browse/uninterpretable
I liked: I nestle at the final destination:the epilogue of my journey
as I lay dying.
minus the all of this. Just me I guess...Wes
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Beautifully phrased, the
Beautifully phrased, the whole poem is great to read - like a cryptic crossword but one that delights rather than frustrates me. I shall be reading this one again.
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