On Listening to Mahler
By Silver Spun Sand
Sun, 17 Feb 2013
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Afternoon gives way to evening...
red dogwood ablaze in the sun’s
last rays against slanting shadows
of a paling fence – too day-weary
to stand erect.
They say Mahler’s 5th
turns corners; meandering this way
and that, and maybe that’s the way
I’d like my symphony to finish...
and if it should end, right this minute,
I would be fine with a chair, and logs
on the hearth, agapanthus in a vase –
belonged to my grandma; a book, a dog.
A child, soft and sleeping.
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tina: perhaps cut the first
tina: perhaps cut the first 2 lines of the 2nd stanza and start the 3rd line with "if". further, looking at it, your could cut your first 4 lines of the 2nd stanza and "joyful nor sad" also. perhaps 5th line
I would be fine with a chair, and logs
on the hearth, agapanthus in a vase--
and on as you had it, your closing two lines intact.
if this steady output is mostly new then i continue to be amazed. i only write a grocery list every 10 days. Swep
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A contented evening picture.
A contented evening picture. It reminded me of the phrase 'wanting to drop in harness'. A drum-roll would seem a bit self-aggrandizing wouldn't it?! Rhiannon
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This poem makes me feel
This poem makes me feel quite content. And I am listening to Mahler's 5th in the background. Had to know what it was about.
Nice poem Tina.
;)Pia
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wonderful poem...i love
wonderful poem...i love Mahler...indeed the man takes you on journeys...very magical, Tina :) - alvin
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