Cleave = Cut or Paste (IP)

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 15 Nov 2013
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9 comments
 

Broad road so smooth
with ease we go
so glad to choose
pleasure, although

the narrow way
with stones, steep slope
beckons today –
and proffers hope;

who cares how long
we little do,
let’s sing a song
and muddle through;

(check strengthening given
that’s powerful
to reach the haven
wonderful;)

but we love to lure
others to come
to taste, endure
our careless fun;

no loungers like
the joys and toil
of a hard-work hike –
from prayer recoil;

best not to worry
nor work too hard,
if later sorry,
well, that’s too bad.

‘Cooees!’ invite:
‘It’s worth the trek,
the goal’s in sight,
– don’t stay off track!’

 

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for feedback, Bear. I wasn't sure if I'd got what was meant. At first I had 2 'voices' that could be interspersed, and that wasn't easy, but I tried to change it so that the combined voice was just one voice, but considering the other position! Luke had put up a blog about words that could mean their opposites, like 'cleave' and 'sanction' and lots of others I've forgotten now, awhile ago, but I have failed to find much about '3-way equivoque' so maybe I ought to search for 'your' site you found. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Your poem makes sense and is a good cleave poem         Elsie

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Elsie — it's an encouragement that you thought so. regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

This is lovely, Rhiannon. It's one I'll want to keep reading and thinking about.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Bee, I'm glad you found it thought-provoking. regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Well done, Rhiannon.  A good poem written in a challenging style, and as Bee says, 'thought provoking'.  It is one I shall return to, again and again.

Much enjoyed.

Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Tina, for your feedback. warm regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by prettyrose on

Hi Rhiannonsmiley, I hope your well and great work, loved how you cleverly written it, well done yes

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Prettyrose, I'm glad you enjoyed and got something out of it, and thank you for your kind words. Nice to hear from you, warm regards, Rhiannon