From Out a Window (I.P.)

Cherry

By luigi_pagano

Tue, 10 Dec 2013
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7 comments
 

It is the small hours
in a Mexican town.
In the dark night
fireflies frolic
and compete with the stars;
cicadas converse
in a low monotone;
others souls slumber
awaiting the dawn.
In an elegant villa,
surrounded by hibiscus
and bougainvillea,
a lovesick señorita
looks down on the street
from out the window
of the top floor.
A band of mariachi
is assembled below.
They strum and warble
on behalf of a suitor.
Te quiero, they sing,
and her knees turn to jelly.
Although wide awake,
she must be dreaming.

© Luigi Pagano 2013

 

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Comments

Submitted by Sooz006 on

Luigi this is gorgeous. This isn't words it's a painting. 

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Hi Sooz, long time no hear. How are you doing? So pleased that you liked this poem and thank you for the super feedback. I very seldom read prose but I know your excellent writing from the past and I have been meaning for a long time to have a peek at your latest contributions but so far I haven't got round to it.

Luigi smiley

 

Submitted by Sooz006 on

Hi Luigi, I'm okay thanks. Haven't written much in the wy of fiction, lately. so nothing new to read, love.  And you are more than welcome. 

 

Submitted by Luke Neima on

Incredible Luigi. This is such a vivid picture you create, here. Took me to a warmer, lighter place.
 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I visited the country many years ago,Luke, I wish I was there now. So glad you felt the atmosphere.

Best, Luigi

P.S. I had to change the format of three words fron Italic to Normal as the former affected the line breaks of the poem.

For example:.

a lovesick señorita looks down on the street

(Again might be the fault of my browser, I'll have to investigate).

 

Submitted by Luke Neima on

Have just had a go with the italic for señorita - it looks alright to me on Firefox. Does it cause a new line break on your browser?

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

No, on the contrary, it loses the breaks.When I post the piece and italicise some words the line break is OK on the preview but when saved the line break is not there any longer, for example my lines

a lovesick señorita
looks down on the street

become one continuous line:

a lovesick señorita looks down on the street

It is very odd, I too use Firefox and my OS is XP.