The Heat of the Desert I.P.

By skinner_jennifer

Mon, 24 Feb 2014
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In the coolness of the night,

millions of jewelled stars

sparkle; embroidered on

a blackened canvas,

 

but when comes the rising

rays of light...images begin

to pulse in the hot, raging

sway of the desert sun,

 

creative illusions in a hostile

land...a vast lonely ocean of

grains of sand, showing no

compassion to the common man,

 

only subsistence a watering hole,

taking refuge in the shade...beneath

the shadows of contoured trees;

where the sun shimmers through leaves,

 

then once more on again across

bleak windswept land...on and on,

if you should live to see another day;

count your blessings before they drift away.

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Lovely clear descriptions, Jenny. I especially liked the picture in verse 1 of the clarity of the desert sky, and then the hot daylight air distorting. and the 'contoured leaves'. The last verse seemed to picture someone just walking on with a vague hope of finding another watering hole in time -?
Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

As Rhiannon says, Jenny, crystal clear pictures you create for the reader.  You transported me right there...to that desert, with your words.  Thank you, so much, on a wet and cold eveningsmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

you got that last stanza completely right.  I really felt inspired by the I.P.  this week.

Thank you so much for reading and for letting me know your thoughts,  very much appreciated.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Tina,  you know I was only saying to you yesterday,  how much the desert inspires me and I couldn't resist writing this one.

I'm so chuffed I could transport you and that you enjoyed.

Thank you so much for letting me know.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

You have created a very vivid image of a trek across the desert, Jenny, alluding to the oppressive heat, the mirage, refreshing oases and all the obstacless that one may encounter in a hazardous journey.

Best, Luigi x

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Luigi

really pleased you enjoyed reading this IP.  Haven't been inspired in the poetry lately,  but the desert always captures my imagination.

Glad I could take you there and your words were exactly right.

Appreciate your comment and thank you for letting me know.

Jenny.  xx

 

Submitted by celticman on

land and sand and sun, a testing ground for saints.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

It sure is Celticman!

thanks for reading and your comment...much appreciated.

Jenny.

 

 

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

Your talent for descriptive scene-setting really comes to the fore here Jenny.  I enjoyed this very much.

Linda

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thanks for the lovely comment Linda...really appreciate those words.

Glad you enjoyed and thank you too for letting me know.

Jenny.