Love?

By Denzella

Fri, 07 Mar 2014
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The photo is nothing to do with the poem. I just like it!

Love?

I bathed in the soft pool of your love.

I swam in your sea of tranquillity.

I trembled at the touch of your lips.

I came alive with the sound of your voice.

 

When morning came we showered away

All traces of our night-time of love.

Being wet did not cool our ardour

As water poured from the shower above.

 

First locked in a loving embrace

Next thrashing about on the floor

As we succumbed to lust for each other

Before being parted once more.

 

With fingers we traced our faces

Making tracks in the steam on the glass

As we lovingly washed each other,

We knew this kind of love could not last.

 

Love such as ours is not meant to endure

The trials and tribulations of life

It carries its own seed of destruction,

Passion alone cannot make me a wife.

 

Would I regret one single moment

If by chance I should meet someone new?

No, there’s nothing could make me repent

The hours of love spent with you.

 

But now we must face separation

And I hold back the pain as we kiss

I turn away to savour the taste of you

Before tears wash you away from my lips.

           

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Dear Moya, we seem to coincide in our choice of topics. I have just posted a poem, Time To Say Goodbye, that is about separation which is mentioned in the last stanza of your poem,  although mine is more about jealousy and suspicion than love. Your style is more traditional and very good it is too, whereas my approach is experimental. I can envision the situation you describe with neat and rhythmic verses.

Luigi

 

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Dear Luigi,

Thank you for commenting on my poem and I will pop over to  your site to read yours post haste.  It does seem as if we are attuned to  each other in our choice of topic.   However, I think you are  a much more prolific poet than I and your expertise with iambic pentameters and the like far outweighs mine.  I am very much a novice when it comes to writng poetry and I always have to take a deep breath before posting any poems of mine.  However, I do enjoy writing them and often feel the need to write a poem after a long dry stint of prose.

Thank you once again,

Moya

 

Submitted by Bee on

I'm so relieved the photo has nothing to do with the poem, Moya. Very expressive of those emotions, wistful and yearning. Lovely words - I could be wrong, but if it was me, I'd lose the commas at the ends of the lines where sentences don't need to be broken. I think it might help with the flow. Please ignore if you think I'm wrong. I really like your poem - there's so much feeling in it. And I like the photo, too.

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Bee,

How you have gladdened my heart with those words 'get rid of the commas'.  The reason I put them in is because I don't usually punctuate poems but someone said i should.  However, I'm never sure how to so i just chuck them in for good measure..  I have a lot to learn when it comes to poetry but I struggle on and sometimes I'm  quite pleased with the outcome.

Glad you liked the photo of my Lincoln helping wiith the dusting!  I calll him my German au pair.

Moya

 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Moya, it must be obvious that I am no expert. When I was at school, we were told that when writing a poem there should be a comma at the end of each line and a stop at the end of each stanza. Now I think to myself - if in doubt, treat it as normal sentences and punctuate accordingly - commas and stops occurring where they are needed throughout, regardless of line endings. But that might be just me. 

Lincoln is gorgeous!!!

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

Bee,

It is not at all obvious.  I  really like your poetry and the reason is you make your thoughts accessible to such as me.  I don't have a poetic bone in my body but I do like poetry and I like to write it though more often I write comic verse.

Moya

 

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

Hi Moya.  Nice picture and even nicer poem.  A scorcher in fact, I almost came over quite unneccessary.  Young passion, or love, so poignant.  The last verse says it all.  And don't kid us you can't write poetry!

Linda

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello LInda,

Thank you for your generous comment and I am really thrilled if you think I can write poetry because I always have to take a deep breath before posting any of my efforts on here, particularly when there are such great poets like yourself and so many others.

Moya

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Moya,

this was such a bewitching poem and reminded me of young love,  when nothing mattered but being together and sharing those special moments.

Beautifully done.

Jenny. 

 

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Jenny,

Thank you for the read and comment.  Nearly missed it.  I'm glad you think it counts as a poem.

Moya