Let’s Build An Ark
By well-wisher
- 554 reads
1.
Can’t you feel
the raindrops falling;
the flood is real
and Nature’s calling.
2.
Can’t you see
the danger brewing
unless we
change what we’re doing.
Chorus:
Let’s build an Ark;
build it together
because the dark
and stormy weather
is heading this way.
Let’s build it today.
3.
Can’t you tell
the bell is tolling
for you as well
but you’re just strolling.
4.
Can’t you hear
the distant thunder;
clouds over there
you will be under.
Chorus:
Let’s build an Ark;
build it together
because the dark
and stormy weather
is heading this way.
Let’s build it today.
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Comments
There is a strong melody
There is a strong melody running through this piece, in verse and chorus. I was able to sing it to a riffed melody and wasn't stopped by and awkward syllables or clashing consonants, so well done.
The last line of the third and fourth verses seem like you may have stretched for the rhyme at the cost of finding a more impact full word... consider different, looser types of rhyme, possibly? But you're just strolling could be 'the time you're holding', or 'tragedy unfolding', or 'the flesh is molding'...
Just a thought. Thanks!
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