Battle Cries

Gold cherry

By Bee

Mon, 12 May 2014
  • 21562 reads
46 comments
 

He crouched through flash-backs
sipping dregs of self respect
thrown up by light of day and downed
again each night.

Comprehending that an end for him
was not in sight, he knocked,
but got no answer - 
only echoes of familiar voices  
shouting cries of victory 
that had arrived too late. The War they said
he'd fought to end all wars was never far away.

He knocked again, and still no answer came -
just those eerie echoes of the fallen  
calling him to join them 
behind death's door.

Certificate 12
Poem
Other Non-fiction

Comments

Submitted by blighters rock on

A gleaming, quietly accomplished poem that shines with all the hallmarks of a true poet.  Well done, Bee

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you BR. That's really kind and very much appreciated.

Bee

Submitted by celticman on

I like the echo of the past lived in the present.
 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks CM.

Bee

Submitted by catherine poarch on

I'm so pleased for you that you have won, Bee. It's great, just the right length and to the point but also elusive. It makes me think of Somerset's lovely old Harry Patch, living so long after his friends died, living with the burden of so much memory. Congratulations!smiley I think we need some balloon symbols for 'hooray!

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Catherine.

Thank you so very much. Really pleased that you liked it.

Bee

Submitted by prettyrose on

smileyHi Bee, sorry for my late congratulations, but I have only just starting writing again and back on Abctales the last week or so.And catching up a lot lol. But brilliantly,handled and written, and so happy for you that you won.Love it.

 

Take care

Trish x

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

Submitted by Frances Macaula... on

Congratulations and very well done, Bee.  So deserved.  This moment is so haunting, I can feel his clammy skin.

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Submitted by Bee on

Hi Frances.

That you could feel it makes me think I got that part right. Thank you for your congratulations, and for your kind comments, too. That's very much appreciated.

Bee

Submitted by lostinanovel on

Well deserved win. Each word punches.

Submitted by Bee on

Hi  lostinanovel,

I appreciate you reading. Thank's for taking the time to comment. 

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

bee, 

just re-read this poem and its lost none of its power.  it is quite simply the best of any new war poem i've read and could easily sit alongside siegfried sassoon and wilfred owen.but they actually experienced the horror.  you are writing from the distance of time so  all the more remarkable.

loved it moya

sorry about lack of caps broken shoulder. need  o stand up if want caps  

 

Submitted by Bee on

Oh no, Moya, what happened? To your poor shoulder, not the caps. And where have you been, I've missed you?

Thanks so much for your really lovely words about the poem - seriously, what a nice thing to say.

I hope your shoulder gets better very quickly.

Take care,

Bee x

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

Bee,

The reason i haven't been on here much is that i lost my husband the sunday before christmas and i am struggling to  cope with his loss.  We were very happy in the fifty four years we were together and I feel like half of me has been amputated.  I am trying to carry on but it is hard.  At first, I wanted to cancel the Parinson's show but they have all put so much work into it that i coluldn't let them down.  It alao keeps me very busy so gives me  a reason to get up in the morning.  My Derek was a wonderful man who made friends wherever he went and I miss him dreadfully.  Sorry to unload this but you aske d me why I wasn't posting.  I have some old stuff I might put up at some point.  I see you have a lot o f new poems and i will get to them eventually.  I still love your writing.

Moya

 

Submitted by Bee on

Moya, please could you send me a private message - (I'd send one to you, but no one seems to get the ones I send, even though I do receive them still) - and then I can send you an email if you wouldn't mind. 

Bee xx

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Bee,

I did receive your email and i clicked the reply button so i hope you got my message back to you.  If not then tell me on here and I will send a new email to you.

Moya

 

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