Próxima Parada
By Parson Thru
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The bus stopped with a lurch.
Several passengers, who'd been preoccupied, spilled into the aisle among a confusion of paper and gadgets.
Outside, the scenery stood still.
Sleepers opened their eyes uncertainly, confused by the new sensation of stasis.
The door hissed and I stepped down to the pavement.
Spilled strangers, improvising one-liners, savoured the shared moment.
The door thudded back in its seal and a hot cloud belched from the exhaust.
Behind the glass, faces returned to their preoccupation.
I stood awhile and took in my new surroundings.
A sign up ahead said "Day one".
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Got that early atmosphere
Got that early atmosphere just right. 'Spilled strangers, improvising one-liners, savoured the shared moment.' Great line.
Day one and full of promise.
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Hooked already! Enough to
Hooked already! Enough to keep the interest but vague enough to wonder. Little point - using 'spilled' twice? I want to see where this goes.
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