Love Endless Eternal and Unrequited

By Vesper Holly

Fri, 28 Aug 2015
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Where love is concerned perhaps it is time to admit the truth

I love only him who either by temperament or circumstance

Does not return the passion of my youth

Sir, do not flatter yourself that it is your charm, your wit or your physique that I admire

I am simply a slave to ill fated romance

Seeking the stone that breaks the wave,  to feel my own soul crashing with desire

Ears tuned to melodies in minor keys

Bring deeply personal epiphanies

Some love stories end in woe

yet sadder still the tales that never start

His name my lips echoe endlessly, A confession whispered only to my pillow

Thus love's eternal entreaty never wanders far from my own heart

 

Unrequited love never to be recieved

is never truly given

so do not by my tears or smiles be deceived

The tears are for the stormy sea and the smiles for the darkened sky

Love that never sees the sun,  is passion that by daily life is never compromised

Eternal shadows shelter me, I love you faithful and unseen as a ghost

Exiled from my lovers arms,  I am constant

But if you should return my love

I'll leave you when you love me most

 

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Comments

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

I really like this imperious, honest voice, full of power.

Submitted by Vesper Holly on

Thankyou!

Submitted by scratch on

The first three lines of the second stanza are really good.

 

Submitted by Vesper Holly on

Thanks!  I guess this is why it's good to get feedback, as I almost deleted the first two lines, thinking they were too obvious.  I am glad they work!

Submitted by Zabeth on

This is one of my favourites. It's a bit different in style from your other works- it has a more straighforward, almost prose-like quality. I'd be interested to see you try your hand at more prose pieces.

Submitted by Vesper Holly on

Thank you,  it's interesting to me that you find it the most prose like, as I was actually trying my hand at a more classical poetry form with this, a sonnet, though I suppose a modern one as it is free verse.  It was inspired by one of Neil Gaiman's sonnet called Dark Sonnet that really moved me and I felt inspired to write something similar.  always so interesting to get feedback!  Thank you.