Did You...

Cherry

By Bee

Sat, 12 Sep 2015
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Did you take my hand and lead 

us to the edge of water,

where our damp companions leapt 

cavorting on the firm and level sand? 



Did their sinking feet skid ragged trails 

of joy that spoilt the shiny surface 

from the tide's slow drift

into the distance, gifting treasures 

in the form of shells and gleaming gems?



And were we there - sea breeze in hair, 

brief brush of lips - 

a salty kiss to curve of neck,

and did I shiver from the chill,

or from the thrill of nearness, 



even with such distance of reality 

between us, or just for those 

exquisite moments,

were we really there? 



Let's not answer now, but savour 

dreamt of memories

while they linger sweet deliverance 

from multitudes of troubles 

in a life of care.

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Submitted by Weefatfella on

Aye, good memories can help us through the roughest times. Great images. I can see the long hair whipping in the wind as the tide seeps in between the toes.

enjoyed.

Weefatfella.

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Submitted by Bee on

Hi WFF. 

So pleased you saw all that. Thank you so much.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

A dream like mix of memories and imaginings and hopes to ease the stress? (did you mean 'dreams of memories' rather than 'dreamt of memories' in the last stanza?)

gifting treasures in the form of shells and gleaming gems –- a lovely phrase and the description of the smooth sand left by the receding tide being spoilt by footprints like what happens to freshly fallen snow.

Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Rhiannon.

You've got me thinking again. I think dreams of memories suggest that the remembered event actually happened, where dreamt is more what I was after, in that the event dreamt of is fantasy. So I'll leave it for now, but I think dreamed sounds a bit nicer, so still thinking. Thank you for that - your thoughts as always, very much appreciated. 

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bee,

I'm all for treasured memories. It's nice to reminisce of times past, remembering those moments when life was so easy going.

Your poem brought to mind my own unforgettable recollections.

Thank you for sharing.

Jenny. xx

 

Submitted by Bee on

I love to think of times spent by the sea, Jenny. So glad this brought back memories for you, and thank you.

xx

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Only in our dreams are we truly awake, dear Bee.  A beautiful poem.

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

I believe that, Tina. Thank you, you put it so beautifully.

Bee

Submitted by celticman on

the shift and drift of reality is your special gift. lovely. 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Such a sweet surprise to get cherries. And thank you for your kind comment, CM. 

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Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

Another beautiful and heart felt poem. So much of your work seems involved in the sea and nature in general.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jean. Yes, I do love the sea. It's where I go to escape. 

Bee