Muse

Cherry
Poem of the week

By Pat G

Sun, 22 Nov 2015
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14 comments
 

each bird kept secrets 

     no whispers

 

as the tide brought bodies       

     rolling 

into the tangle 

 

     the beauty of dying 

     beyond     

    

bodies carried gently 

     from storms 

to curtains 

     of cloud       

    

the beauty of knowing

     in a moon’s phase    

that life is done 

 

     ~~~

 

we stand against 

the dying 

     night 

     

caught before the sun

 

     between 

     the blinding dark 

     and blinding light

                  

deciding on lines 

     that 

     wash the shingle and

bring bodies ashore  

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Comments

Submitted by london_calling79 on

Lovely flow to this poem. Could me maudlin and cliched like so many 'sea' poems but your short but long lines and stark imagery skilfully avoid this. I love the sound.

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you for the comments.

Submitted by london_calling79 on

This could fit nicely into the inspiration point.

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

The beauty evades me somewhat, chilling with the dehumanisation of death and the shift from living to matter.  You have the rhythms of the sea, echoing the relentless cycle.  Lucky to be the ones at the edge.

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you for the thoughtful feedback.

Submitted by Bee on

Took my breath away reading. Something cold in the stark delivery... Described beauty.

Bee

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you so much for that.

Submitted by Ladylily on

Lovely  Spiritual  thread.

Written  beautifully. 

LadyLily

Submitted by Ladylily on

Lovely  Spiritual  thread.

Written  beautifully. 

LadyLily

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you for the comments. Appreciated.

Submitted by celticman on

nicely done. 

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Thanks for reading the piece and commenting.

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Beautiful poem, so much said with an economic use of words. 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Pat G on

Many thanks for that.