Radioactivation

Cherry

By Bee

Mon, 15 Feb 2016
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12 comments
 

We can block them out by day

but in the troubl-us hours of nightflairs

they echo loud and clear.



*Fair amount of success with thechem-

*Certain to be swel-  edema

*Chest wall   neck   lung dam - burni...  

*cough   possibl-,  arm    no say...ing

*Nothi  we ca - predict predict -

*wait and see. Better tha... nthe-alternative...

*With an aim of pro...   long Outcome... ?

Echo

Echo

Echo



on and on till dawn, when oblivious,

the sun radiates from nowhere

to glare on welcome sleep.

Certificate 12
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by celticman on

yep, I guess an echo of unease, that can never please, but come sleep or we'll weep. 

 

Submitted by Bee on

'come sleep or we'll weep.' Never a truer word spoken. 

Thanks CM

 

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Bigsmiley for cherries. Thank you.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

troubl-us is a well-invented word.

Getting back to sleep, and quietening the thinking whatever it's about can be so hard once half awake. Recently I had the experience of my mother-in-law recovering from a chest infection and a sudden explosive very unpleasant bark-cough coming through the monitor each time I relaxed and was drifting off. Had to turn the level down a bit in the end to soften it and did sleep then, at last.

Hope you have more peaceful nights soon - and can sleep on through the sunshine a bit maybe.

Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I like the way the way the stuttering words compliment the troubling thoughts. Hope you manage to bang them on the head.

 

Picture Credit:http://tinyurl.com/jtnwtnq

 

Submitted by Bee on

Glad you think it works, insert. Whenever freaky thoughts overtake, a phrase pops into my mind, 'This too shall pass'. Applies to everything one way or another - good and bad. 

As always, the picture you have chosen is perfect. Thank you. 

x

Bee

Submitted by seashore on

Read it twice, just to get the right 'feel'...and yes, it's all there, quirky, original and very real. 

Submitted by Bee on

When someone tells me they took the trouble of reading twice, I feel honored. Really glad you thought it worked. Quirky is good, too, though unintentional. 

Bee

Submitted by seashore on

Probably the wrong choice of word and I hesitated before typing 'quirky' - "original" was more accurate so forgive the tautology, Bee..  I  think your poem is exceptional, and thank goodness you can use your talent at this difficult time.

All good wishes to you.

 

Submitted by Bee on

No, I was chuffed with quirky, but thank you again, for your lovely words. 

x

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

Very clever this and well thought out. As with all your work, the effort you put into the writing is apparent but also seems natural.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

What a really great, and very much appreciated comment. Thank you, Jean.

Bee