We Women

Cherry

By Bee

Wed, 27 Jan 2016
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19 comments
 

We walk out and are

wheeled back in again on trollies.



On proper beds, we already feel sorry

for the new girls on the ward



awaiting their turn

because we know what's coming. 



But morphed off our heads, we soon 

forget the initial pain of suffering -



like having given birth - can only vaguely

recall how bloody awful it was...





Later that day, or the next, or the next,

we walk out of the short-stay place, shocked 



tit-less - we women on a reduction line,

praying it's over with. 

 

Certificate 12
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Ed Crane on

Know that feeling.

Good luck Bee.

 

 

 

Submitted by Bee on

I know you do. Thanks Ed.

x

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

My heart goes out to you Bee and all those women who go through the same thing.

Take care.

Jenny. xxx

 

Submitted by Bee on

 Thanks Jenny, for your kind heart. 

x

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Heart-rending, dear Bee.  

Especially poignant your play on words (i.e. reduction)  in the penultimate line.  

Tina x

 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Pleased you thought so.

Thanks Tina.

xx

Bee

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I hope it's over with for you now xxx

 

Submitted by Bee on

Me too. 

Thanks insert.

xx

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

Bee,

I can only guess at your pain and your new body if I can call it that,  will take some getting used to but with all that you have already had to deal with, I think your courage will once again see you through.  So, I will just try to convey how your poem struck me.  I think your use of the word 'morphed' has been carefully chosen in that perhaps you feel you are a different person; you have morphed into someone different.  I also think 'We  women on a reduction line' is  suggestive of  a conveyor belt and that you feel you are being processed.  Just how it struck me.  Probably got the wrong end of the stick.

In my thoughts,

Moya x

 

Submitted by Bee on

You were spot on as to my intentions, Moya, as you always are. 

Thank you

xx

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

The cherries brightened a grey day.

Thank you. 

Bee

Submitted by VeraClark on

The collective "we" and the turfed out, women in to the world, after such an ordeal is written so casually and more powerful for it.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Vera. I'm glad you said that cos the next couple are written as 'we', too. It feels very much like that. 

Bee

Submitted by love_writing on

'We walk out of the short stay place'

'titless'

So poignantly written Bee. Heartbreaking - all those unseen women on a horrendous conveyor belt. Well done to you for being so brave to shine a light on this x

love_writing

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you, LW. I really appreciate your reading and comments. x

Bee

Submitted by celticman on

women on a reduction line. Like the wit. [short-stay] hyphen

 

Submitted by Bee on

I'm glad. Thanks CM, and for the hyphen. 

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

Short and to the point. Well said.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jean.

Bee