A poem to Silver Spun Sand

Cherry

By Bee

Mon, 14 Mar 2016
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A flock of swans yodeled over 

and I thought of her

in her garden, awed

by the rhythmic beat of magnificent wings.



A sudden shadow cast a cloud

above the ink-fall of her pen 

which marked a sketch of the musical thoughts

she remembered tripping

from younger fingers all

about the keys to her feelings - dolce, at first,



then smashing tremendous crescendos; 

unanswerable questions,

starting with, where

do they fly 

when their last song fades 



to a sound like the rush of a brush

on the metal of cymbals brimming

with flashes of rainbow thrown in with a fritter 

of life, do they float off the edge of the earth,



as glitter, charged bright 

in beautiful splashes of silver spun sand

to flare their ethereal light to the stars?

Shine down on us, stars - remember

we know you.

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Submitted by tcook on

I like so much of this - it's got real feeling and it's a great idea - but the 'lovelies' in the first line jar with me. Maybe just make it: A flock yodeled over' . I may well be wrong. What do others think?

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Tony.

Thank you for looking. Totally agree and have changed it now. 

x

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Dear Bee - had to reach for my box of tissues on reading this.  It is so very, very beautiful...almost as beautiful as those winged 'lovelies' which shall, henceforth, be my (our) pet name for those amazingly graceful creatures, others....not in the 'know', obviously,  call swanssmiley 

You have made my day with your inspired gift for poetry...and as I look out of my window over the fields toward the moor, the sky is crimson.  No lovelies tonight, but tomorrow is another day as someone once said.smiley  

Tina xx

 

Submitted by Bee on

Tomorrow is another day - that's for sure. And that's one of my fave films. Glad you liked the poem, Tina. 

x

Bee

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Perfect.  A gorgeous tribute/nod in the direction of a talented lady with an eye for nature and life, from a talented lady with an eye for nature and life. xx to both.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Bee on

That's so nice. Thanks PT.

Bee

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

You got her down to a T!

 

Submitted by Bee on

To a T - made me smile. 

Bee

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Loved this!  Great tribute to a womderful writer. :)

Submitted by Bee on

Wonderful in deed - the best. Glad you loved it Philip. 

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

For the cherries - smiley

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bee,

you've captured the essence of Tina perfectly in this poem.

Wonderful.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jenny. I'm glad. 

Bee