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Gold cherry

By seashore

Sat, 06 Aug 2016
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by Julia (Overthetop1)

 

The baby boy that went missing

left a gap in you - huge like the sun

now another him has left a hole

and you clutch at your scattered selves -

You think you are just pieces, fractured,

and I know you wonder if your mind

is loose, careering in your empty house

 

But to me you are utterly complete

complex, but whole, real

always the total mother.

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Overthetop 1
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Submitted by airyfairy on

It's a beautiful poem, full of so much love.  It seems trite to say I hope it brings some comfort on this sad day, but it may help that Julia's writing still burns so bright.

Submitted by seashore on

Thank you airy fairy xx

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

It must have been a big encouragement to you, and so carefully written.

And now, it seems to point you forward in still trying to encourage others with the abilities you have, as you are able. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

What a beautiful thing. It's my daughter's birthday, too. Our gaps and holes are part of what is us. Lots of love.

Parson Thru

Submitted by seashore on

Many thanks PT.  You are so right.

Happy birthday to your daughter. xx

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thanks. I'll pass it on. X

Parson Thru

Submitted by seashore on

Thank you too, Rhiannon for your kind words.

Extra tough day this year, so posting this was one way of dealing with it.

Submitted by celticman on

poetry, I guess, needs to resonate beyond the boundaries of literal meaning and lodge itself in your heart. Job done, here. 

 

Submitted by seashore on

yes I think so too, so thanks on behalf of Julia, celticman.

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

A beautiful poem - simple and strong, but also a wonderful thing for her to leave for you. No better proof of the power of words

 

Submitted by seashore on

Thank you insert X

Submitted by VeraClark on

So moving, the pared back direct style leaves a lasting impression.

 

Submitted by seashore on

Thanks, yes obviously this one meant a lot to me, even more so now, but I also like the way it was written.  Julia was far more versatile with her writing than she realised.

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This lovely piece is our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day

Get a  great reading recommendation everyday

Please share/retweet if you like it

 

Submitted by seashore on

Thanks insert - proud on behalf of my daughter x

Submitted by london_calling79 on

Gorgeous. Says so much with the perfect amount of words. My birthday on that date too! Great people born on that day. :)

 

Submitted by seashore on

Many thanks.

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Such wisdom here.  What wonderful words from a daughter to a mother.

Submitted by seashore on

Thank you PS,  yes re-reading Julia's words is a reminder (as if I need one) of our closeness.

Submitted by Kilb50 on

A very moving poem - each word justified and demanding recognition, nothing wasted, the brevity achieving something of considerable beauty.

 

Submitted by seashore on

Lovely comment, thanks so much.

Submitted by samhennig on

Seashore this is a concise and beautiful piece. Such feeling.

Sam Hennig

Submitted by seashore on

Thank you so much Sam - it means a lot.
Coral (Julia's Mum)

Submitted by torscot on

At a loss in how to respond to your daughter's words.

So I hope its not a cope out by saying all the above comments for others say it  for me

Take care

torscot

Submitted by seashore on

No it's not at all, I appreciate & feel your empathy Torscot, and thank you for that. x

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Coral,

you know your daughter was very gifted and when I read some of her comments on my work, I found her to have a lighthearted, good humour about her. I'm sure she was a very special daughter who had an artistic nature like her mother, because her words resonate just how versed she actually was.

Perfect poem to a loving mum.

Jenny. xx

 

Submitted by seashore on

Thanks Jenny.  This is very special to me obviously - she never realised how talented she was, but I'm making it my mission to try and do something with her writing, maybe via Mind, as she worked for the charity as Senior Press Officer.

Coral xx

Submitted by hilary west on

This is a beautiful poem, so simple and yet so telling. I hope it brings some consolation to know people feel for you.

Best Wishes,

Hilary West

 

Submitted by seashore on

Thank you Hillary,  yes it does help...just a bit.

Submitted by bosch on

your girl wrote beautifully. 

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