One less spring

By hedgehog1

Sun, 18 Jun 2017
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My house was quiet winter was all around

Springs child was laughing outside

I was that spring child as my years decline

Looking back, then looking forward

I was young like a bee thinking of honey

Each year one less bee

Then I will see one less spring

Bringing one more winter

And then ???????????????????????????

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Submitted by celticman on

and then, death or dementia. 

 

Submitted by hedgehog1 on

So very true celticman 

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Succinct, but says what's needed - well done. Not sure all those question marks add anything though. One would do the same

 

Submitted by hedgehog1 on

Good morning Interpon.....

Thank you for your kind words about my poem. The question marks just happened but I can see your point.

Edward (hedgehog1)

 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Life's journey told. Everything has a beginning and an end.

I like the way you used the bee in this poem Edward.

Jenny.

 

 

 

Submitted by hedgehog1 on

Good afternoon Jenny,

Thank you for your kind words on my poem. I find short poems more challenging than longer ones. I was sitting in my garden watching the bees that have made a nest in the side of my pond and that spurred me on to write "One Less Spring"

Edward