Into The Blue

By Mary-Ann

Sun, 14 May 2017
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Into the blue
Arms spiraling out
Threading on the ocean waves while the tides carries me
The eruption of laughter so giddish and free
Happiness evoked by the passers whom see

Into the blue
It's the artist and dreamer that reach
Always provoking a scholar and free minds
Still it's the dreamer whom teach

Certificate 12
Poem

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Mary-Ann is this meant for Poetry Monthly? I'll pop into the correct category if you let me know (or you could do it yourself)  : )

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Children of the sky! A beautiful poem but it could perhaps be rounded off a bit? This really is just my impression, and also I probably can't be specific.

Keep well Mary-Ann! Tom Brown

 

Submitted by Mary-Ann on

Thanks for all the comments and suggestions I appreciate it.

M Storm

Submitted by Nolan on

The total freedom of the artist and the dreamer: "Into the blue arms spiralling out" is lovely it makes one think of a type of galaxy such as the Milky Way. By the way I wonder if wasn't meant to me "Treading".

My best wishes & Nolan

 

Submitted by Mary-Ann on

Thanks for the comment Nolan, as always I appreciate it,guess who's smiling right now.

M Storm