The Cutting Room

Cherry

By Philip Sidney

Fri, 26 Jan 2018
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12 comments
 

They were looking for a cure 
for the smart-ass girl –

whip-tongued - serpent-haired -
colour writhed along her nerves -

she lacked stillness -
required for shadowy shots
of a doe-eyed femme-fatale -

was too frenetic 
for Technicolor slabs of red and white
gingham-dressed smiles -

they toned her down
made the edit
with a simple trick - 

a thread of wire
swiftly pushed to neatly snip
connections -

white coats made notes -
barely noticed she'd slipped away - faded
as though on cellulose

her world made
a backward - half-lit negative.

Certificate 15
Poem

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This is another one that gives something extra with each read (as all good poems do)

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Thank you insert - and thanks for the cherries toosmiley

Submitted by CXL3 on

Love the images 

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

It leaves the reader standing in a corner wondering, what the f**k just happened? Certainly one of the best poems I have ever read by you.

 

Excellent 

 

Submitted by Yutka on

very athmospheric and cleverly written!

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Thanks all for reading and commenting.  This is part of a series of poems - I might put some of the others up too.

Submitted by Di_Hard on

The title becomes horrible when you've read the poem

 

Submitted by Kat027 on

Wow. Excellent depiction of character and heart-stopping conclusion! Your metaphors are both stark and subtle... if you know what I mean. Very, very well done.

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Thanks for reading, Di and Kat - horrible and true.

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello  Philip,

I am not sure I understand it because I don't always pick up on metaphors but I would like to understand it.  I'm not good with poetry, lacking a poetic soul as I do but I will come back to it again. Sometimes that does it for me.

Moya

 

Submitted by iwylie on

Wow, what a crisp and eloquent read. Like a card trick in your mouth. Truly wizard. 

 

Submitted by iwylie on

Wow, what a crisp and eloquent read. Like a card trick in your mouth. Truly wizard.