Bare beauty

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 07 Dec 2018
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9 comments
 

Trees with costume windswept, lost,
stretch their branches sculpted,
– bare and beautiful, upthrust,
from grounded trunks, well-rooted
– earth-bound branches grip and grasp
creep in crevices and clasp
fast against the wintry blast
– high-speed air sweeps past.

 

Certificate U
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Nature
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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for the cherries. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by hilary west on

Hi Rhiannon,

It certainly can be high speed air sweeping past. I liked some of the alliteration in this. It works well !

Hilary    yes

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, HIlary. I do enjoy alliteration, maybe it's from my Welsh heritage! We've had some strong winds lately. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

This is such a wild scene and certainly one of my favourites of yours Rhiannon.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. I do enjoy the bare tree silhouettes this time of year against the sky! Rhiannon

( I always have to check that spelling. I remember when we were young, my sister had called it a 'siily-houtty' when she'd read the word but not heard it pronounced!)

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

I think this is pure quality. It sounds so good in my head, I want to hear it read aloud by a man with a nice voice. Those solid consonants hold each other up without rubbing together, just like the branches of a tree Rhiannon.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank, Jane. Really appreciate that, and glad you enjoyed it too. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I like how this is balanced above and below. Also the contrast of

"earth-bound branches grip and grasp'' which seems clenched or bitten out in the struggle

and

"high-speed air sweeps past." with all the long vowels whooshing and full of sky

 

 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Di. I always appreciate your analysis of the sounds. Rhiannon