RV

Cherry

By Di_Hard

Sun, 03 Feb 2019
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While flowers and fruit and leaves fall, birds rise

calling dawn from horizon's broken shell;

song from bare branches brightens silent cold;

and soon new leaves will burst from sun teased buds;

silken, a following wave in the swell

flowers unfurl far from old frost's reaches -

from these, fruits, juice-full rounding to sweet weight;

yet through it all, as notes for wind laid

in the staves of trees, -eggs, sky blue, cloud white

dusky. Movement from still yolk, a - heartbeat -

largo's embrio, allegro hatches,

grows, then tempo impetuoso - flight!

 

   

 

 

 

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Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

beautiful Di

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Insert :0) and also for the cherries!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

How much  metaphor you've got going there for the life history of those eggs! I've assumed RV stands for Recreational Vehicle ie Camper Van as the home of the developing embryos? as they develop in a largo state before their allegro and tempo impetuoso burst into life and flight into the new blue sky shell!

Bird song does increase about this time of the year doesn't it?

A pleasure to read through slowly to absorb your rich thoughts! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much  Rhiannon :0)

I wondered if RV was a bit obscure. It's not intended as camper van, though I love that idea, eggs are sort of caravan shaped, I'd not thought of that.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hello Di,

finally got around to reading your poem and I'm so glad I did. You describe the newness of nature's birth as Spring once again returns perfectly.

Just love that line:- 

soon green leaves will burst from sun teased buds and also:-

In the staves of trees, eggs, sky blue, cloud white

and shadow speckled, movement from still yolk

largo's embrio, allegro hatches

and then tempo impetuoso - flight.

 

These are such impressive metaphors which were very inspiring.

Thank you for sharing.

Jenny.

 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much for taking the time to read this Jenny, I'm so grateful you let me know which bits worked for you. Something had seemed clunky and  I had changed that bit but now not sure that was the problem after all. Very helpful kind comment, thankyou!

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Pity you took the RV (again) off, Di; it was the version highlighted by Noo in the January's Poetry Monthly summary. Anyway, either would have been a good choice for a mention. Well done.

Regards, Luigi x

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Argh I am hopeless :0) Thankyou Luigi for letting me know Noo mentioned it on Poetry Monthly, that is so kind! Trust me to delete the wrong one, I guess it's too late to do anything about it now