Seasons Connect

Gold cherry

By Rhiannonw

Tue, 12 Feb 2019
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… The sunshine weak,
light-hours brief,
few plants in leaf,
’til seeds awake …

… the seeds awake
when light grows stronger,
remains for longer,
buds swell and break …

… buds swell and break,
green grows, and flowers
of many colours
cased seedlings make …

… cased seedlings make
to safely hold
new life through cold
of sunshine weak …

[Poetry Monthly February: Connect]

(photos my own)

 

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Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I love how you connect one stanza with another in this poem Rhiannon. The beauty of each step of growth is such a miracle and it shows in your poem.

Very much enjoyed reading.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. Thinking about the prompt, I started wondering about trying to connect stanzas, and then thought of the gradual changing of the seasons too, and sothought to try to convey that in this way! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I also love the connections here - a lovely response to the brief - well done

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Insert. I appreciate that. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Cherries appreciated too, thanks. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

I too love the arrangement Rhiannon, it really works and of course the theme is perfect for February, the soil warming and those seeds about to burst unseen with so much in store.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jane. I'm glad you felt it worked. Brevity can be so nice when it works, but if it doesn't, it can be ambigous or spoil the subject! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

that's so clever! It reads like waves coming in, each one higher than the last, or a time lapse film. I love how the last line in each verse links to each next like cogs fitting perfectly, it emphasises how everything works perfectly one stage through to the next, and then back to the sunlight in a circle. Gives a of a sense of rightness

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Di. Your pleased and thoughtful reading and comments are always a pleasure! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Congratulations on your Golden cherries, Rhiannon. Connecting the poem's stanzas was a clear device to make use of the prompt.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Luigi. The idea of stanzas connecting was all that came to me at present re the prompt, but I soon realised it wasnt easy to do unless you had the subject in mind and the reason for connections, but in the end thought about the merging seasons brought the ideas together, and after a rather rough start, it settled down into what was obviously working for others too! Rhiannon