BOOM or BUNCO
By Ed Crane
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BAM! POW! WACK! BOOM! ---- 2016
We are such lucky spoilt little boys
with all these brightly colored toys
in primary shades and pretty hues.
Stripes and stars, red white and blue.
I’ve got mine and he mustn’t touch.
We don’t like each other very much.
Although we have more or less the same,
I don’t want him to join in my game.
See my ships and planes and rockets;
robots with guns inside their pockets
and model soldiers all ready to die.
They’re really cheap, so I won’t cry.
This box with lights makes pretty patterns
If I push this button I wonder what happ……......
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BAM! POW! WACK! BOOM! ---- 2020
We are such lucky spoilt little boys
with all these brightly colored toys
in primary shades and pretty hues.
Stripes and stars red white and blue.
You have yours and I have mine.
I'll have to return them after a time.
I never want to give mine back!!
In fact, I want to increase my stack.
You’ve made sure no one can touch.
Show me how - I love you very much.
When we have more or less the same,
I won’t tell them about our game.
See our ships and planes and rockets;
robots with guns inside their pockets
and model soldiers all ready to die.
They’re really cheap, so we won’t cry.
This big red button will save our face.
The threat of a push keeps ‘em in their place.
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It appeared to me that in the
It appeared to me that in the second version of the poem that the children had grown up, but remained friends even with their differences.
Great idea for the I P.
Jenny.
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world leaders with dodgy
world leaders with dodgy haircuts?
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"I’ve got mine and he mustn’t touch.
We don’t like each other very much.
Although we have more or less the same,
I don’t want him to join in my game."
and
"and model soldiers all ready to die.
They’re really cheap, so I won’t cry."
The way you boil it all down to a game works so well, boys and their toys.
In the second part, 5th line "I’ve got mine and you have yours.", you have no rhyme? So it sort of hiccups out of the otherwise chillingly great nursery rhyme flow?
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unfortunately your thoughts
unfortunately your thoughts mirror mine. If it was poetry I'd say it's history.
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