Winter Trees

By hoalarg1

Wed, 04 Mar 2020
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Winter trees
Do you mourn
the falling of the 
leaves?
Your shadow broken
Stiff, dead still
Dry boned boughs
The fractured skin
And some birds pass you by
See straight through you
But me
Whose eyes
nest in you 
like spring 
all impatient 
Clawing at the
roots of you
Shoulder colour
through
'til dawn

 

Certificate U
Poem
Rainbow World
Nature

Comments

Submitted by Frances Macaula... on

I like the content, the voice and the point of view but humbly - and with great respect, wonder if the line spacing serves your words as well as they could... just a thought because, I too, love trees and enjoyed your words.

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Submitted by hoalarg1 on

Thank you for your feedback. I think you're right. It definitely needed tweaking.

 

Submitted by onemorething on

I really like this, I love your eyes nesting in the trees. Lovely. :)