Storm, no rain!

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 12 Jun 2021
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10 comments
 

Strong heat
hot air rising high
to meet clouds of
water droplets:
electrostatic build-up
gigantic spark
shoots to earth
down from the cloud,
air disturbed –
thunder sound-wave loud
bright flash hot ignites
dry grass:
fire!

[IP: fire, earth, air, water]

 

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Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon, you bring drama to the elements with this poem. I hope you didn't have to go through a storm like this to create the scene.

Great I P. yes

Jenny.

 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jenny, no! I realised how the IP words were relevant to the formation of lightning. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Excellent work Riannon! I have been in a storm like this it's called a lightning storm or electric storm there is no rain. Very scary if you are alone in a house with no furniture and no curtains. Can be terrifying.

Yes a flash from the blue can also happen just Zap! Cloudless sky. Also on a gholf course sometimes people have been killed.

Keep well! Tom Brown

 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Tom. I just set off trying to think how lightning occurs, because of the words suggested in the IP that seemed to connect to it. I suppose these storms do make us realise our limited power in ourselves and can be awe-inspiring. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Felt tense just reading this! It all happens so fast, like the strike, skillfully done

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Di. Reading it now, I see the tension! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by rosaliekempthorne on

The sharp, economic wording really brought energy to this piece. You could feel the tension and momentum - kind of like lightning getting ready to strike.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you. I appreciate your comment. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

You seem to be able to make a poem about everything, and it is all very well done.

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jean. I always seem to have wanted to gather my thoughts and issues succinctly like this I suppose! Rhiannon