Haiku - Daffodils.

By D G Moody

Fri, 17 Mar 2023
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Daffodils surprise

arising out of black earth

as Spring now rises

      

© D G Moody 2023    

(Image courtesy of Sarah Lou, Altphotos)                

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Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Good. The shock from short says more than wordy! A lovely shock those daffodils to all who are tired after winter — trumpeting! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by D G Moody on

As always your comment is appreciated and an encourgement

Blessings....Dougie

Dougie Moody

Submitted by Penny4athought on

Yellow, Flower Trumpets, heralding spring, the beautiful daffodil. A nice poetic tribute.smiley

Penny4athought

Submitted by D G Moody on

Thanks for the words of appreciation, always welcome.

Dougie Moody

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Know the flowers just didn't know it's daffodils. Beautiful contrasts, these small poems are a great art. Were they origianally chinese? I would have said "spring rises". While we're heading for winter.

Keep well! Tom

 

Submitted by D G Moody on

And glad you liked the poem. I take your point, regarding - rises instead of arises; looking back at the poem (a Haiku), I can see how arising and arises may be too close. The strict Haiku is a 5-7-5 sylable three line. But I can revise the last line to still keep it as five syllables; I'll look at this - thanks.

Best from Old Blighty.......Dougie

Dougie Moody

Submitted by D G Moody on

Just changed it, with the third line.

Dougie Moody