'A bump of originality'*

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Thu, 25 Jan 2024
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In our writing is there
an unexpected twist, insertion,
a catch in the rhythm
a sudden fresh application
the jump that has capacity to change
the line of assumption
grip the attention,
or bring a smile
while
linking to an amusing connection?

As when music composition,
technically clear
following rules of pleasant sound
for ears to hear
attend the flow.
needs a shock, to rock
the attention, an unexpectedness
a spark or bump of originality
(not too much, descending to cacophony)
to take its place of honour, fame,
present as something different,
not just the same
old thing of pleasant relaxing theme,
but an individual, original
to be remembered, respected,
held in esteem.

[IP: originality]

*This phrase has been in my mind since the IP was set, but I can’t find where it came from, so I wonder if it was a phrase of my father’s when I was young. But it reminded me of my young son having some time with someone about his musical composition and being told that there needed to be something to give a bit of a shock, wake up the audience, and he was pleased and intrigued that the lad seemed to sense that already instinctively

Certificate U
Poem
Miscellaneous
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

a nice exploration around the Inspiration Point - thank you!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

thank you! It took a bit of thinking about to try to get my thoughts clear! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the cherries on this. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

When writing I never end up going in the direction I started at. New ideas form and lead me on a new path. Music definitely helps the process. Your poem describes perfectly that many a piece of music, poem or story can be based on themes of old, yet given a new lease of life with a little bit of imagination.

Like the thought behind this I P poem.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. We can give our individual original touch, or bump, or spark, I think! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by marandina on

There's that lovely rhythm again. I like the way this flows, Rhiannon. Nicely done, as ever. Paul

[Is that intentional the way the title is spelt?]

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Paul, and oops! no, the title wasn't meant to have a typo shock in it! Thanks. so easy not to check the title! I hope that doesn't mess up the links of comments. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by D G Moody on

Such an interesting title and exploration - a bump of originality; with just the right timing and effect, a good one again Rhiannon.

Dougie Moody

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Dougie. I hoped the idea would spark interest! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

That made me think of being in a car, on a flat road (bit rare these days) then going over a bump which makes everyone a bit more alert and look out of the window. Or maybe a little stone, or stick in the desert, which becomes the base for a new sand dune and eventually changes the landscape

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, I'm glad it got you thinking anyway! It's why I chose that sign of 'bumps in the road' but doctored it to show just one bump! As you imply the bump in writing or music mustn't be too intrusive but as an unexpected turn, wake up to take more notice and thought! Rhiannon