Time-Lined
By adld
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Time-lined, I drink tonight
with smooth-faced people.
Share cigarettes, talk much, join
drink for birthday drink with younger friends.
A toilet's shock reflection let’s me know
that each and every year has taken toll.
I sometimess think mirrors should be banned
for older men - at least when drunk
and you forget to look away.
Why bother, after all, let youth have hope, I say.
Yes, I'm bitter, cheers.
You want excitement - danger?
Christ, just wait. I'm living near the edge,
or front, of some approaching war,
where terrorists inhabit any person, any cell,
to strike at random, for no cause.
Some friend's were taken out - a stroke,
exploding heart attack , or gout.
Same again. No, my shout.
Things shift, you look
just inches down the track,
ignoring things you lack
(youth, beauty, time) -
not watch from windows,
but leave doors flung wide
to any fortune that might yet decide
to come.
Oh right - a Jaegerbomb.
Well, down in one.
Now velvet times where night birds sing
or even scarlet walks along a cliff
should be our home, or is,
I'll travel soon and be
surprised, amazed,
more often than you know
in sunburst and in ebbing tide,
among these wrinkled oysters beds
where starfish go.
I'm off now - see you soon -
will catch the vomit-comet if I run .
But wherever you go next,
have fun.
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Comments
I'd like to see the first
I'd like to see the first stanza given a looking at. Make the sting and the urgency that lives in this great poem hit right from the start. Very excellent nonetheless. Congratulations on the pick.
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lovely, well, not lovely, but
lovely, well, not lovely, but mellow, well,not mellow, but wise, well, not wise, but just as I thought.
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brilliant
especially like the second stanza, but all were equally as great. Well deserved.
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"...I sometimess think
"...I sometimess think mirrors should be banned..."
No need to do that. Have fairground mirrors installed in the house.
Guaranteed to make you look great first thing in the morning.
Regards and well done on the awards
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Reminds me..
This reminds me of my attendance at my son's stag party! I love all those boys but they are serious when it comes to getting out of it and I have to remember to vaguely pace myself these days. A great poem - it hit the mark exactly.
One tiny niggle - friend's should be friends!
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Reminded me of Harold Pinter
You write with a lovely free flow, an easy strength. You are using words like weapons.
Brilliant work
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Just loved the last two
Just loved the last two stanzas. Gave me chills
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