In Love With A Girl

Cherry

By Bee

Tue, 24 Mar 2015
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19 comments
 

I'm in love with a girl; fair hair 

and sky-eyed - gives the sweetest kisses.

Says she likes my breasts; plunges in 

face first and rests there, 

casually using me for pillows.



I'm back in time with her - riding bikes

and scooters; skating to the shops. 

Collecting colored leaves,

eating sweets sometimes, 

and cakes instead of lunch. 



We paint dances along the street

between the passers-by, who smile;

sing until our skipping hearts collide;

collapse in laughter

just for laughter's sake. Cry.



As for me, I know my love will last, 

but she'll move on. 

I only hope to be remembered 

by my sky-eyed girl, 

and that when she's grown I'll be around 

a while, to see her happy. In love.

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Comments

Submitted by tibi popovici on

Find it so nice, Bee! a lot of feelings combined with innocence smiley

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Tibi. Appreciated.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so much for the cherries. smiley

Bee

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

This is so lovely.

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Philip,

Bee

Submitted by catherine poarch on

Yes, it's lovely. I also liked the sky-eyed. And the skipping hearts collide. Makes me think of the Beatles. It's beautiful without being soppy.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Glad you didn't find it soppy, Catherine. I had thought of putting a sloppiness warning on it. 

Thank you so much. 

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Unremarkably remarkablesmiley

'Painting dances' ...inspired.

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

'Unremarkably remarkable' - I love that. Thank you Tina. 

X

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

Stories like this can never be told too many times. I think you've made a super job with your version. Like Tina I was especially taken with "painting dances" it made me think of a Lowry painting.

XX Ed

 

Submitted by Bee on

I'm so pleased, Ed, thank you. 

Hope you had a nice visit with your family.

xx

Bee

Submitted by VeraClark on

Soppy means honest where kids and hearts are concerned. Coloured and full of love Bee.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Sorry Vera - I missed your comment. You are so right - the time passes so quickly we should indulge in soppiness while the opportunity lasts. Thank you. 

Bee

Submitted by hoalarg1 on

I enjoyed this. You painted a wonderful picture of your relationship with your little one. Congratulations on the cherries!

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you hoalarg.

Glad you enjoyed.

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

You've captured the thrill of a grandchild's complete acceptance and unquestioning love. Beautifully done. I hope you're going to make a collection of your work for her to read to her grandchildren. Whatever happened to that book by female poets that you had published last year?

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

A collection is a lovely idea. The book's out there - can be found on Amazon - My Baby Shot Me Down by ten women writers - prose, and some poetry, too.

Thanks Jean.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bee,

this is a poem that would light up anybodies day, some children symbolize joy and you just want to embrace them. The picture was very angelic and went with the poem so well.

Beautifully done and enjoyed.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Bee on

She is a joyful child. I'm glad you liked the picture - I took it off a video where she had just been chucking great handfuls of leaves. That's why it's quite blurry - I love it, so pleased you did, too. 

Thanks Jenny.

Bee