Sunset

Really like this Beeme, particularly the first stanza and that fractured bone image. :-)

Yes Beeme - it's the same image that stands out for me too. I also particularly like the first two lines that lead into the poem. xx

Hi there, Beeme. Really like this; some fantastic imagery. Just a couple of suggestions regarding your 'ing' endings in the second stanza. To explain this is the way I see it:- Sepia angel wings cup her ashen face; smudge elfin features against the skyline patches of fleshy pink hang like Chinese lanterns, ornaments of hope slowly descend with incandescent glow. By removing those endings, you accentuate the lovely internal rhyme of 'cup' and 'smudge' and 'descend' and 'incandescent'. Also, removing the 'an' from the last line helps the poem to 'flow' better. It also makes a nice contrast with your first stanza, which is more dreamlike, and where the 'ing' endings work well;-) Again, just suggestions. As I always say, 'it is your poem', and a very good one. Tina xx

Hey - that's great now, Beeme;-) The icing, on the already delicious cake...speaking of which I've made myself peckish, so shall go and put the kettle on and have a biscuit or two. Enjoy your weekend. Tina xx

Hey - Beeme, you got a cherry! More than deserved;-) Tina xx

Very lovely, well deserved cherry.

This is gorgeous, Beeme :) 'The sky's hazy champagne waves circle the bone white moon.' - I'm simply in love with this image, stunning :) Rachel xx

Love the 'champagne waves' and chinese lantern images, Beeme. Such a beautiful and fragrant piece! Well done on the cherry :) Magic xxx