Twilight Time
By Cavalcader
Mon, 21 Nov 2011
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Twilight time
with circles of like
golden full moons
on a long wire
Further on I walked to
the blue sparkling tree
lit up higher
with mauve intermittent
Droplets hanging down
and twirling around
like! tear drops
falling to the ground.
All comments.
This follows on from
The young eccentric gentleman.
May go in local paper,and
photo of him.
Not sure how much yet.
Days are early. I had few tears,
so put it into poem structure.
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Excellent poem. Visually
Excellent poem. Visually stunning and descriptive, my praise to you writing friend!
- Chinobus -
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You paint a colourful
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
You paint a colourful picture of twilight time with your words, Julie. I really like your description of the droplets being like 'tear drops falling to the ground'.
Tina xx
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Very good, Julie. When I saw
Very good, Julie. When I saw the title I thought it was going to be about teenage vampires. Thank goodness it's not. Hope you and Ray are well.
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Really enjoyed this, Julie.
Really enjoyed this, Julie. You seem to get better and better - much the same as a good wine I suspect.
sue
TVR
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Beautiful Julie, as you
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Beautiful Julie, as you mentioned with the song this poem goes straight to the heart.
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This is very good. One of
This is very good. One of those poems that you know goes much deeper, but you can't grasp exactly why. Frustrating sometimes.
Nolan &
(I've been catching up Julie, good work.)
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This is one of the best
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This is one of the best poems of yours that I've read. It's very beautiful and brightly coloured. I can imagine it as an abstract expressionist painting. Lovely.
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