The Wet Patch
By Edenfalls
Mon, 16 Jul 2012
- 2370 reads
10 comments
We lay there together
In the afterglow of love
Still sharing that moment
That beautiful moment
Where our bodies became one
Where the excitement eclipsed
In the soul of our beings
The velvet smiles from you
The “god I love you” look
That only a man can give
The hidden telepathy from
Two beings sharing the most
Exquisite moment of joy,
Warmth and longing
The caress of love that
Lingers in our thoughts
And minds, till we both
Shuffle away, not wanting to
Mention, the one thing
The only thing that
Comes between us......
- Log in to post comments
Comments
I really liked this - I
I really liked this - I don't know what you think but I was wondering if it might be better to leave the last line out and let people work it out for themselves from the title - it just turns into a punchline for me and detracts from your lovely description - maybe that was the intention? Anyway well done.
- Log in to post comments
It's not often i'm right so
It's not often i'm right so it makes a nice change. atb fatboy :-)
- Log in to post comments
Well, I don't know what that
Well, I don't know what that line was but I got it and if I do then others surely will because when it comes to poetry I'm a bit dim.
Thought it was brilliant and funny.
Moya
- Log in to post comments
Good call FB, definately
Good call FB, definately works better.Very original EF.
- Log in to post comments