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Gold cherry

By hoalarg1

Wed, 28 Jun 2017
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I looked       for you           behind dust

         blew       time         free

flung open           curtains.
 

I opened stuck doors

through hallways

         to unearth scents of you

threaded with perfumes        caught

in discarded fabrics

         once treasured

 

pulsing       these       rooms

like embers
                  in faint glow.

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Comments

Submitted by PoppyS on

I like the images behind this piece, but I struggled with some of  the flow (I am not a lover of over punctuation) but perhaps some, might help this a little. I also struggled on line 6, (you lost me there).

My apologies if this is me reading the context all wrong.

Pops ~xx~

Writing is art in pictures – Go paint poetry!

Submitted by hoalarg1 on

Thank you very much for your comments and feedback.

 

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Submitted by hoalarg1 on

 thank you

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This wonderful, haunting poem has stayed with me for days - that's why I've chosen it for our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day. Please share/retweet if you like it too!

ps. hoalarg I couldn't find the image you used with a creative commons licence. Could you please provide a link to show it isn't copyrighted?

 

 

Submitted by hoalarg1 on

Thanks for the pick, that's great. I hope I have added the contribution correctly?

 

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Submitted by Parson Thru on

Lovely. The words hang in the air like the scents. I like the mystery - lack of resolution. Almost like a quest.

Parson Thru

Submitted by hoalarg1 on

 thank you Parson thru. I'm glad you took something from it.

 

Submitted by celticman on

I like it. ephemeral and yet..