Moon wishes

By Kahdai

Mon, 19 Apr 2010
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The candles are left melting
when the crescent moon is waxing
and the people set their wishes to the west,
believe to come true, when they see the full-moon.

I will know when you are strong
& we can stay out all night long,
forget whatever we've left behind.
Head back to the real world
and our responsibilities,
yet not until,
we see the whole moon.

The nights spells will win us over
and then you feel your body waning
Let us take some time to recover
before we see the energy draining.
The cold numbs our muscles
throught to our bones,
darkness wakes us up
only ache for sleep.

The clouds clear,
hear wolves howl,
home ones cheer,
seeing the moon.
Wishes come true
free one go home.

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Comments

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I love the first two Kahdai! Why not post them all as separate poems? Then I think it's easier for people to give feedback! (Just a suggestion!) I think you've missed out a few spaces in that last one though here - 'abubble' and 'inthe'. And I think 'thehr' should be 'their' - hope this helps! Really love the images you have used in this one by the way! ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Yeh, thanks, will do, just rushed you know. :) xxx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by shoe on
Hi Kahdai, I really liked the images of the first one, the first stanza especially. I found the the third one interesting with a strong message, though a little abstract, if that's the word. I think with a little editing it would be even better, :~}

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Thankyou shoe, yes still abstract as it is, always glad when you comment, I will get on editing these now. xx :)

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "