Attrition

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By london_calling79

Sun, 10 Jul 2016

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21 comments

Slick vast crush of bare ocean,
split white with dolphin crest
and the roll and the roll,
frets and worries at the lip of the world.

Canted concrete gulls circle above
the hiss and the flow,
the caw and the caw,
insistent wings clung to wind.

Thin foam salt fingers dissipate,
mark sand ruts,
give up their hearts,
here, here in the slipping shades

of darker shadow, rock
eroded by an ailing ocean
and the ragged beachhead
and the moulting gullwings
and the stone strewn shoreline
of the lost
and the losing.

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yes, it is very waering,

Permalink Submitted by celticman on Sun, 2016-07-10 15:14

yes, it is very waering, losing adn losing, but I guess if you go with the flow and just say no.

Everything will be lost some

Permalink Submitted by london_calling79 on Mon, 2016-07-11 07:04

Everything will be lost some day so there's no point in trying to make it stay.

some beautiful movement of

Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on Sun, 2016-07-10 15:36

some beautiful movement of words in this poem and great metaphors; as in

slick vast crush of bare ocean,

split white with dolphin crest

and the roll and the roll,

frets and worries of the lip of the world.

Really enjoyed your poem.

Jenny.

Thank you for the read and

Permalink Submitted by london_calling79 on Mon, 2016-07-11 07:04

Thank you for the read and lovely comment Jennifer!

The sea as a fretful man with

Permalink Submitted by VeraClark on Mon, 2016-07-11 06:02

The sea as a fretful man with all the mind's inner anxieties tossed up like flotsam.

...as everything erodes

Permalink Submitted by london_calling79 on Mon, 2016-07-11 07:05

...as everything erodes around him. Some of it his own doing.

The restless wildness of the

Permalink Submitted by Rhiannonw on Mon, 2016-07-11 08:55

The restless wildness of the ocean still makes me glad of watching from the solidity of the land! Rhiannon

The ocean always makes me

Permalink Submitted by london_calling79 on Mon, 2016-07-11 10:39

The ocean always makes me feel lonely so I share your love of terra firma!

Just noticed the cherries!

Permalink Submitted by london_calling79 on Mon, 2016-07-11 10:48

Just noticed the cherries! Thank you so much!

some of the word combinations

Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on Mon, 2016-07-11 15:19

some of the word combinations in this are fantastic - definitely one to read aloud

Cheers insert! Can't write

Permalink Submitted by london_calling79 on Mon, 2016-07-11 15:24

Cheers insert! Can't write about the ocean and not try to bring its noise.

I love the drama of the ocean

Permalink Submitted by seashore on Mon, 2016-07-11 15:37

I love the drama of the ocean, and you have captured this so well in a word-painting.

Thank you seashore. Means a

Permalink Submitted by london_calling79 on Mon, 2016-07-11 16:15

Thank you seashore. Means a lot coming from you.

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Made my day! 'Honoured and

Permalink Submitted by london_calling79 on Mon, 2016-07-11 19:02

Made my day! 'Honoured and humbled' as some May say.

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Stunning lc...can hear all

Permalink Submitted by love_writing on Mon, 2016-07-11 22:06

Stunning lc...can hear all those gulls ( that caw caw- they always sound like they are laughing in s mocking fashion!) crashing waves, fantastic placing of words..such an emotive piece x

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