Shoot!

Gold cherry

By Parson Thru

Sun, 06 May 2018
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12 comments
 

 

The octogenarian

tore down the wing

tapping the ball

chasing it on

in her

octogenarian

way

 

Team-mates

and opponents

alike

were left

stranded

 

With only

the keeper

to beat

she ran on

down

the touchline

staying wide

 

I don’t know why

she stayed out

on the wing

finally striking

ten yards out

hard and low______________

half shot_________________________________

half cross_________________________

 

The keeper

also wise

in her years

couldn’t

get down

but had

the angle

covered

 

Hugging

the post

she knew

the shot

was

hopeless

 

It hit

the metal

and ran

out of play

 

A

decent run

though

all the same

 

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Comments

Submitted by bosch on

Parson, oh Parson, pretty good. a poem to itself would involve your subject choices. Swep

Submitted by Parson Thru on

:))))

Grab your inspiration where you can bosch.

Thanks. Much appreciated.

Parson Thru

Submitted by well-wisher on

I always like poems that challenge poetry's formal conventions and the shape of the poem seemed to mirror the story being told and give a feeling of dynamism and motion to the poem.

Also you could say that every poetic experiment is like a goal scoring attempt and some are just decent runs while others hit their mark.

I feel this is a poem that certainly hits its mark; the innovative structure also lending itself to the humour of the poem as if it were an animated cartoon in words.

Oh look, a link. I wonder where it leads.

JoHn

Submitted by Parson Thru on

I'm glad this one worked for you, JoHn.

Experimentation is the way. More misses than hits, and it's impossible to say until you air the idea. Thanks for your lovely comment.

I haven't really explored them fully yet, but Apollinaire's "Calligrams" point the way. And everything since, of course. The idea to try to depict the shot and the spacial relationship of the two players just came in a flash. Best to go with those prods in the back.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

An interesting structure and image.  I like the idea of elderly sportswomen - why not?

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Why not, indeed, Philip Sydney?

Parson Thru

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Could be a metaphor for a life well lived - could be in praise of elderly sportswomen - either way it's a pleasure and our pick of the day!  Do share if you like it too.

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thank you for the lovely surprise!!!!!

Parson Thru

Submitted by celticman on

seems like a metaphor for Rangers. 

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

I heard their troubles are over now.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Kilb50 on

Pattern-poems can, I think, sometimes feel a bit forced in their construction. This poem, Parson, is inspired with its shape complementing and formally adding to - in an exciting way - its subject. And as a footy fan the crowning glory of elderly ladies on the pitch made me laugh out loud! Great stuff!

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thanks Kilb50. That's really nice of you. I'm made up that you lol'd. I can die a happy man. Or just sleep for 7 hours, maybe.

Parson Thru