Snapshot of my brother
By seashore
Fri, 04 Feb 2011
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Your photo
shows you looking
straight at the camera
With that smile-for-the
photographer look
And your hair sticking up
in places it shouldn't
Just the same
as when you were
my child-brother -
You still look younger
than me though
of course you're not..
Now seeing you again
all I feel is pity
None of it was your fault,
you didn't know - and
I'm sorry it's been
so long, too long.
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A gem of a poem,
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
A gem of a poem, Coral;-)
Tina
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very emotive and extremely
very emotive and extremely beautiful Seashore, the last lines are just perfect :] xx
k.
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I agree with celticman- what
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I agree with celticman- what a good way of putting it. Brilliant seashore
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Last three sections are very
Last three sections are very poignant and this works so well overall. ATB fb
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Hi seashore, enjoyed reading
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi seashore,
enjoyed reading this poem, it sounded quite
emotional.
Congratulations on the well deserved cherries.
Thanks for the read.
Jenny.
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ScoZen Seashore, hello. Very
ScoZen
Seashore, hello.
Very short but says a lot.
It reminds me to get in touch with family before its to late.
Regards
ScoZen
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What's left unsaid here is
What's left unsaid here is equally as important as the well-chosen details. Again, as in the past, I really appreciate the open-ended, stoy-like quality of your poetry.
barryj1
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