A Small Ceasing to Be

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Tue, 03 Jan 2012
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I don’t kid myself
the world will stop
because you’re not here;

trees will still give up
their leaves in winter.

Rain will ever fatten
the pumpkins,
and spiders, spin
their silken sacs
on garden spades.

And yet, as I gaze
at the moon
with its entourage
of a symphony
of stars...

I am filled
with an emptiness
so immense
I dream of being
where you are...

It feels like heaven
smells...
like the blues.

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Submitted by EpheLuwe on
Hello Silver... This is a gem indeed! I love the subtlety of it, the length of the poem works well to expound its sensense of tragedy. As for the last line, rarely is someone blessed with the ability to bring things to a close with such a perfect cadence. Well done :)

Stains..

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Epheluwe - I much appreciate your reading, and taking the time and trouble to comment. Many thanks for your kind words. Silver;-)

 

Submitted by Highhat on
I think the word "subtlety" is a very appropriate description of the way you manage to keep far away from hysteria- but the blues you have are nonetheless saddening and I'm so glad you are able to express it so well that we readers are enrichened with your talent. I wish you a happy day and week Tina. ;)Pia

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Pia, thank you, so very much;-) And I hope your week, too, is filled with sunshine of the warmest kind. Tina;-)

 

Submitted by seashore on
Just dropped by to say...yes, a gem indeed. x

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thanks for dropping by, Coral. Pleased you liked;-) Tina x

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Haven't been around that much but always a pleasure to come back and read your poetry Tina - this is beautiful. :-)

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
fb...great to hear from you, and I hope you are OK. Pleased you liked this one, and I really appreciate your words. Tina;-)

 

Submitted by MaliciousMudkip on
Absolutely beautiful. Nice and simple and all the better for it, well done. :)

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
MM - pleased you enjoyed this, and many thanks for telling me;-) Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
I could understand the feelings in this poem so well Tina, yes life seems to go on and time does not wait, for as we get older and have seen the many changing seasons and felt the happy times and the sad times, continue to fall upon us all and as we get older and wiser, we can ponder on the many moments in our life, the loss of loved ones and the chain of events, that have led us to where we are now. Sorry if I'm rambling, I just found this poem so profound, poignant and beautiful, so many feelings wrapped up as one. Great read. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Jenny, you ramble on all you want;-) There is much truth in what you say, and I am really pleased you found so much to identify with in this poem. Many thanks;-) Tina