Sweet Nothings

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Mon, 29 Mar 2010
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26 comments
 

Our very first date –
hanging out at a bedsit,
Shepherd’s Bush way;
he impressed me, playing
a best mate’s drum-kit.
Had a good voice too;
in a group once, he said.

I was painfully shy –
he was kind of quiet;
had a stammer, a bad one –
except for when he sung.

On our way back
on the two-twenty bus,
we shared a Rothmans
and the usual small-talk.
Can’t recall the things
we spoke about...

Just the rabbit he made
out of a hanky,
and how the moon
sat on his shoulder
all the way home.

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Comments

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
A wonderful progression of beautiful images, Tina! I especially love the final stanza and the 'moon sat on his shoulder'. This poem shows how imperfect love can in fact be the most perfect love in the world ;) Brilliant! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
That's it in a nutshell, Magic. Must be the poet in you;-) My thanks to you for reading. Glad you got exactly what was intended from it. Have a good week. Not long till Easter;-) Tina xxx

 

Submitted by celticman on
really enjoyed this

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Really appreciate your reading this and commenting so positively. Thank you;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Beeme on
I really enjoyed this to. I love the last stanza in particular, a truly perfect ending with beautiful images. Beeme xx

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Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thanks so much for that, Beeme. Your words made me do just that;-) So glad you enjoyed. Memories...where would we be without them? Tina xx

 

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
So beautiful; haunting, even. An absolute pleasure to read :) Rachel xx

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Rachel - really appreciate your lovely comment. Thank you so very much;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
More than welcome, the pleasure was all ours! :) Rachel xx

Submitted by vidit.chopra on
"and how the moon sat on his shoulder all the way home" These lines steal all the credit. Nice one. Vidit

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thank you, Vidit. Your comment highly valued;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Well done on the cherry Tina, richly deserved :-) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Beeme - how nice of you;-) Much appreciated. Tina xx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Silver-spun-sand Yes, well done on the cherry! Cleverly done as poet would. Love last stanza to. Just the rabbithe made out of a hanky, and how the moon sat on his shoulder all the way home. It's all a cracker! julie xx

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hi Julie;-) Thank you for reading. I really envy people who can fold serviettes, hankies and whatever. Me, I'm hopeless at such things. So pleased you enjoyed and thanks for telling me. Tina xx

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I have nothing to add except I thought it was lovely! xx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thank you, so very much;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Congratulations on the cherry, Tina :) I'm also envious of people with such talents, especially people who can make little boats out of crisp packets! I'm just all fingers and thumbs and haven't got the patience! Rachel xx

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Each to their own, I guess, Rachel. I think you have found where your true talents lie, and so has ABC;-) My sincere thanks to you. Glad you enjoyed. Tina xx

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Just p-p-p-perfect! You have a knack of making the ordinary, extraordinary; class act! Chris XXX

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Well hello there, Chris;-) You have brightened a grey day for me, except it isn't half as bad as the weather where you are, obviously. I shall try and send some sunshine to you. Thanks for your words, Chris. Glad you enjoyed. Tina XXX

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Very sweet poem Tina, how we accept people without letting different 'faults' & talents, change our minds. Could you please explain what this Rothmans was, I don't know if you mean smoking on a bus, or if it is a new slang term for something one might get up to on a first date. ;) I am a little left behind these fast moving times. I can make a few things folding, infact last week showing off to my little sister I made a blow-up cube out of her chip wrappings. K xx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hi there, Kahdai;-) Yes, you guessed it, Rothmans - a brand of cigarette, and I am talking about the old days here, when smoking was permitted on the upstairs of buses. As for your 'blow up cube' out of chip wrappings, I bet it went with a bang! Thank you for reading and glad you enjoyed. And by the way, who isn't left behind in these fast moving times? I know I am;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Hi Tina, I used to smoke on the bus before too, good times, eh? :) I am kindof glad you can't smoke in some places now, I still think pubs atleast should be allowed. My cube, I think she made it into a game-die(not sure, dice?), I hope my mama binned it after. I like to pop into your imaginative-mind & memories every now & again, it's nice of you to let us. Hei, if we be left behind, I reckon it better, so rather where you are anyway. ;) xx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hi again, Kahdai;-) I certainly agree with you that I think pubs and private clubs should be given the option as far as smoking is concerned. And as for those good times, yes they were. By the way, you can 'pop' into my mind any time you like...well, almost, anyway;-) Tina ;-)xx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thanks for reading, and commenting so positively;-) Glad you enjoyed. Have a good Easter, Nathan, and I hope things are well with you. Tina xox