... I wondered if you might look at your enjambment and punctuation; consider pace you'd like the reader to follow with eye and heart. Quick review of spelling. All these edits I make too, so not poking at you. :)
...as milk from a breast with mastitis. Some pains cannot be prepared for, You handled this piece with sensitivity and knowing. A carefully worded build of peer networks and experience relied on, to a point where they cannot go, because all else...
...that this wasn't an editor's choice. You've handled an abhorrent practice with a dry, factual narrative, a voice relating incident as so 'ordinary' as counterpoint to this horror, raising the mostrousity beyond any use of hyperbole.
This..
Posted on Thu, 13 Nov 2014
...'
within the tangled scrim,
a branch snags, and eyes – orbs,
a lethal mix of ambergris
and antonyms
reflect – become
the moon.'
By crikey lovely lass, tha' can conjure dark beauty!...
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Lovely surreal soundscape...
Posted on Tue, 02 Sep 2014
... I wondered if you might look at your enjambment and punctuation; consider pace you'd like the reader to follow with eye and heart. Quick review of spelling. All these edits I make too, so not poking at you. :)
best wishes
lena...
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Expressed...
Posted on Sat, 26 Jul 2014
...as milk from a breast with mastitis. Some pains cannot be prepared for, You handled this piece with sensitivity and knowing. A carefully worded build of peer networks and experience relied on, to a point where they cannot go, because all else...
Read full commentPosted in It All Came Out in the Wash
Surprised...
Posted on Tue, 10 Jun 2014
...that this wasn't an editor's choice. You've handled an abhorrent practice with a dry, factual narrative, a voice relating incident as so 'ordinary' as counterpoint to this horror, raising the mostrousity beyond any use of hyperbole.
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Good write, I shall lay a
Posted on Mon, 02 Jan 2012
Good write, I shall lay a trail of nutmeg, as for Birds of Paradise :-)xRead full commentPosted in I Stand Outside
Gentle trotting rhythm,
Posted on Sat, 31 Dec 2011
Gentle trotting rhythm, warm, melting into the green of ancient woodland :-) Ah, g'wan, I'm an old softy. Happy new year Ewan xxxRead full commentPosted in Raggle Taggle
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